Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Needless to say that, not enough nations pupils are selecting to study science at university wreaks havoc not onlu on developed nations but also on third world countrise which have led to a major scenario.This is mainly because of studing science is hard. There are number of solutions which should be implemented to deal with this problem.

To pinpoint the paramount causation behind nothing but words, is huge number of student think that this is a hard subject to study. In other words, they see before large ammount of pupils failed this subject on the last year, thats way they do not choces this subject. For example, when pupils choice science at university than they suffer strees and deeprations.Another infamy root is, to much tution fees. It is higher rank subject at university so low standerd learners sceard to take this subject for their study life. As a result, BBC news found that china 65% students do not choce this subject because of huge tution fee.

On the other hand, There are two effective solutions to the problem of pupils do not choosing science. First of all, reduce tutions fee. When university authority decrease learners fees than increasing number of student admited this subject and rise student of science depertment. Therefore, rising amount of student admited in last year on science depertment because of fees are reduced. Moreover, Another solution is, authority give confidence for their students. when university council courage students than reader admit on this subject. As a concequence, varsity has more learners to studing on science.

In conclusion, this cause need attention and ecpedite action to protect us from reduce number of pupils admited to science at university. It is possible not by enforcing or by enacting the law; however, it should be done by educating people about its nasty effects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response identifies two plausible causes—students’ perception that science is difficult and high tuition fees—but the task asks about effects on society, and this part is not addressed. Instead, the second body paragraph gives solutions, such as reducing fees and encouraging students, which do not answer the question. The introduction and conclusion also refer generally to a “problem” without clearly explaining its social consequences. Some supporting detail is attempted, including the example about students experiencing stress, but it is unclear or focused on individual students rather than society. To improve, explain consequences such as shortages of scientists, slower technological progress, or weaker healthcare and industry, and support these with clear examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, and signposts such as “First of all,” “Moreover,” and “In conclusion” help show paragraph roles. However, the overall progression is weakened because the second body paragraph discusses solutions rather than the requested effects, so the argument moves away from the task. Within paragraphs, ideas are often repeated or linked mechanically: the fee point is followed by several statements about increasing science enrolment, while the relationship between the example and the claim is not always clear. Some transitions, such as “On the other hand,” do not express a genuine contrast. Organise the body around causes and societal effects, and use linking phrases that show the precise relationship between each idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts topic-related vocabulary, including “tuition fees,” “university authority,” “science department,” and “admitted,” and it tries to use more formal expressions such as “paramount causation.” However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning difficult to follow. For example, “nothing but words” does not convey a clear idea, “higher rank subject” is not a natural description of science, and “nasty effects” is unsuitable for an academic discussion. Spelling errors such as “studing,” “depertment,” and “consequence” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise, natural phrases such as “perceived as challenging,” “financial barriers,” and “a shortage of qualified scientists.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to form complex sentences using “because,” “when,” and “as a result,” but these structures are often faulty, and the range of sentence patterns remains limited. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently, as in “There are number of solutions,” “when university authority decrease learners fees,” and “pupils choice science.” Some sentences are difficult to interpret because clauses are joined without clear grammatical control, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. These problems can make the reader pause to work out the intended meaning. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then extend them with one subordinate clause, checking subject–verb agreement and verb forms.

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