Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In different nations not enough students are choosing to study science at university. There are plenty of causes and which have effect also on society. which will be explained in upcoming paragraphs with relevant examples.
First and foremost, cause is high-cost cut in university because lack of students. To elaborate, in university there are many students which less economical resources which affect in overall study. For example, there many student which are willing to study, but for economic resources they are behind from other. other cause is less career option and job opportunity. To explain, in science there are less plenty of option which can affect the student focus because of alternative. For example, student have very less alternative of option which student are affect in future.
On the other hand, there are plenty of effect on society such as in future there are many employees which have same degree which effect no their earning. To elaborate, individuals which have not alternative job they will b danger
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 167 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited. While the essay attempts to address the causes (cost and career options) and effects (economic impact), these points are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or logical expansion. The conclusion is incomplete, and the overall response is too brief to fully address the prompt. To improve, you must expand on your arguments with specific examples and ensure you meet the minimum length requirement to allow for a full discussion of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay uses basic paragraphing, but the logical progression is hindered by the lack of content. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive way, such as the frequent use of 'To elaborate' and 'For example'. Referencing is often unclear, such as in the phrase 'which have effect also on society. which will be explained', where the sentence structure is fragmented. The flow between ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each sentence connects logically to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, which restricts the ability to convey complex ideas. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'high-cost cut in university' and 'less plenty of option'. The student relies on basic vocabulary, and there is little evidence of an attempt to use more sophisticated or academic terminology. To improve, you should focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education and economics, and practice using synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('there many student'), incorrect word order, and sentence fragments ('which will be explained in upcoming paragraphs'). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in basic grammar. Complex sentence attempts are often faulty, such as 'individuals which have not alternative job they will b danger'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of relative pronouns like 'who' versus 'which'.
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