Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In severals countries pupils are not agree to take addmission in science at university. I will give this reasons and we will also discus about their outcomes which exsist on society.
To began with, now time many students are not chooising science subject in institutes, because they have a opportunity to get admission in other fields such as, art, mathematics and music class. Moreover they can choose easy subject as, compare to science. people don't want to stuck in difficult fields furthermore, they have no interest in science. Some universities have no enough students due to lack of staff, and it maybe possible, because their staff are not well instructors.
Furthermore, their effects are very bad on local community. If it will be continue so the outcomes, will be wrong in future. skilled persons will be minimise in society so, nation will be out in race of success in coming days.
It will be happen, due to low attraction in science, Science is a crucial part in our life so, we should to connect with it if we want to achieve our goal.
For instance, there was university in Pakistan and they had low amount of students in science class so, the result was very dangerous because it effect on individuals of this country. A survey report show that, they fall their economy,.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects), but the development is limited and the ideas are under-supported. The word count is 223 words, which is below the 250-word minimum requirement, leading to a penalty. The arguments regarding causes, such as 'easy subjects' and 'lack of staff', are presented but lack depth or specific elaboration. Similarly, the effects on society are mentioned in general terms without clear logical progression. To improve, you should expand on your points with more detailed explanations and concrete examples, ensuring you meet the minimum length requirement to fully develop your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is often disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'To began with', 'Furthermore'), they are sometimes used incorrectly or mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the university example and the broader societal impact is weak. The flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors, which makes the text harder to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and collocation, such as 'pupils are not agree to take addmission' and 'skilled persons will be minimise'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you need to move beyond simple vocabulary and attempt to use more precise, academic language. Focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and synonyms to avoid repeating the same terms throughout the essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('their staff are not well instructors'), incorrect verb forms ('If it will be continue'), and misuse of articles and prepositions. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some attempts at complex ones that are often faulty. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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