Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Writing task 1

Education plays vital role in each and every life. everyone life with this individually fulfilled their dreams ambitions. In numerou nations not much learners give priority to study science subject at their institute. The main reason behind this mindset lack of interest regarding this subject. Interest in other curriculum activities The major impact on society like as generate unemployment and new innovative not take place in society. All these points required detail explanation In the upcoming paragraph several reasons and impact on the society will be highlighted according to the statement

To commence, there are abundant of reasons why scholars are not opting the science subject at their university. The Paramount factor is lack of understanding about the subject amongst

the students. To clarify it, Students have lack of interest in science. when teachers are teaching this subject students sit idle in their classroom and they are not able to understand the topic.

As a result, students are lack of ideas regarding science regarding career options field. In addition, Build passion in other co-curriculum subjects. To explain it, in the education sector distinct variety of subjects option are available for the students so students build their interest in these subjects. Moreover, students are love to do extra curriculum activities such as painting, singing, dancing, football many more rather than taking part in science quiz competition. For example, a survey was conducted by World Education Organisation on a group of 200 students found that 80% opted remarkable marks in their exams in other subject rather than science subject.

On the contrary, the effects that will take place in society when the students not study science in their college. The first and foremost factor which can be ignored it will boost up unemployment in societies. To elaborate it, when students are not study science they are not getting jobs in this field as this course provided wide career options to the young blood. This will direct create unemployment situation in the nations. Hence owing to this folks not only suffering from career options but also impact on their living standards. For instance, An article published 'The Hindustan Times' revealed that people are forceful agree to work in low wage rate because they are not study science in main major science subject in their university time

Furthermore, new innovative will not occur occured in nation regarding any sector if the masses are not study science. The science is not one field through scientist do diffirent types of innovative in healthcare, technology many other sector.

In Conclusion, Science subject provides fruitful outcome to all youngsters although students have lack of knowledge and interest in other subject. However in the society it will create unemployment and New expierments will never take places

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and effects. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you provide reasons such as lack of interest and the appeal of other subjects, the explanation is often repetitive and lacks depth. For example, the discussion on 'unemployment' as an effect is mentioned multiple times without providing a nuanced argument about the broader societal impact. The ideas are relevant, but the supporting examples, such as the reference to a 'World Education Organisation' survey, feel generic and lack clear integration into the argument. To reach a higher band, focus on extending your points with more logical analysis rather than simply restating the same concepts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To clarify it' and 'To explain it' are used repetitively, and some transitions, such as 'On the contrary', are used incorrectly to introduce the effects section. Furthermore, referencing is sometimes unclear, making the progression of ideas feel disjointed. While there is an attempt at an introduction and conclusion, the logical flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, which hinders the overall coherence of the argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'bad', or 'subjects' and struggle with collocations. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'new innovative not take place' instead of 'innovation will not occur' and 'young blood' which is an informal idiom not suited for an academic essay. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to education and economics, and avoid using informal or non-standard phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'students are love to do', 'people are forceful agree'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes reading difficult. While you attempt some complex structures, they are almost always marred by errors, such as 'the first and foremost factor which can be ignored it will boost up'. The high frequency of basic grammatical errors significantly impacts the clarity of your writing. Focusing on mastering simple sentence structures before attempting complex ones would be a beneficial strategy.

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