Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is evident that university scholars resist themselves to pursue their higher education from medical field, with several nations reporting this issue in high levels. This notion is mainly linked with lacking appropriate teaching material and increased competition among students. The objective of the following essay is to identify the root causes why students are not opting science stream and the effects it would have on community.
To begin with, one primary reason why academics not choose science as their mains is the poor teaching methods. When they do not obtain the proper guidance and notes, they might feel challenging to remember difficult topics for long time, leading to influence their academic performance. Furthermore, another contributin
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required 250-word minimum, which severely limits your ability to develop your ideas. You have identified some causes, such as poor teaching methods, but the essay is incomplete and cuts off mid-sentence. Because the response is less than half the required length, it fails to address the prompt adequately. To improve, you must ensure you provide a full introduction, two well-developed body paragraphs covering both causes and effects, and a clear conclusion. Currently, the lack of development regarding the 'effects on society' means the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay shows a basic attempt at logical organization with an introduction and the start of a body paragraph. You used a transition phrase, 'To begin with,' which is a good start. However, because the text is unfinished, there is no overall progression or clear paragraph structure. The abrupt ending prevents the evaluation of cohesive devices or paragraphing skills. To reach a higher band, you need to complete your thoughts and use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly throughout the entire essay.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally understandable but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. Phrases like 'resist themselves to pursue' are unnatural and indicate issues with collocation. You use some relevant topic-specific vocabulary such as 'higher education' and 'academic performance,' but the range is limited by the brevity of the text. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid literal translations from your native language. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic and precise terms will help you express your ideas more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors that hinder the flow of your writing. For example, 'academics not choose science' is missing an auxiliary verb, and 'might feel challenging' is an incorrect structure; it should be 'might find it challenging.' You have attempted some complex sentence structures, but they are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Proofreading your work for these small errors will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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