Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In modern technology, many countries does not have enough students who study science at University. Many students are choosing to study at home with using technology. Many student does not have a interest in study science at University and college. This essay will discuss causes and reason in the following paragraph.

To embark with, in many countries not enough students are choosing to study at university. The main reason is a they faced difficulty in science subject. They don't understand the teaching of their professors. They don't have a enough knowledge to related subject. Moreover, teachers and experts creates a high workload on student and that's why they prefer to study at home with technology and other platform. University and colleges led to partiality to choose subject. As a result, many students and learners think they have a better subject to improve knowledge and experience.

The main effect is a, in this following trend many student don't have enough skill to really help in their life and it creates a unemployment rates. After that, they can not improve their knowledge in technology and it decreases their knowledge. Study at home it creates a economic problems such as unemployment in a education sector. Students choose study at home and it's effect on society in different ways. This trend encourage people in a wrong way it's directly affect to society. Fewer students studying science can lead to fewer researchers in the future

In conclusion, the lack of interest in science is mainly caused by difficult subjects and better career options. This can lead to fewer researchers and may slow down technological and economic development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects), but the development is inconsistent. While you identify reasons like 'difficulty in science subjects' and 'high workload,' the explanations are often repetitive or lack depth. For example, the claim that students prefer studying at home is mentioned multiple times without a clear link to why this causes a decline in university science enrollment. The effects are also somewhat vague, focusing on unemployment without fully exploring the broader societal consequences. To improve, ensure each paragraph provides a clear, logical explanation supported by a concrete example or a more detailed analysis of the consequences.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed. Transitions like 'To embark with' and 'After that' are used, but they do not always logically connect the sentences. There is also a tendency to repeat ideas, such as the mention of 'studying at home' throughout the second and third paragraphs, which makes the flow feel mechanical rather than fluid. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the third paragraph where the link between studying at home and economic problems is not fully explained. Using a wider variety of cohesive devices would help improve the logical flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'study,' 'knowledge,' and 'science.' There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'led to partiality to choose subject' and 'creates a unemployment rates,' which are not natural English expressions. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of precision and the limited range of vocabulary prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repeating the same words throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the essay, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many countries does not,' 'many student does not,' 'teachers and experts creates'). Articles are also frequently misused or omitted (e.g., 'in a education sector,' 'a interest'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, which can occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors that distract from the content. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy, such as pluralisation and article usage, will significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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