Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In various countries of the world, students are choosing arts, commerce, and other subjects over science at university. There may be a number of reasons, but from my perspective, availability of other more creative and entertaining subjects and commercialization are the root causes. And these problems will have detrimental effects on our lives, like lack of innovation and noble discovery.

Humans are inherently creative creatures. People are very fond of art, music, sports, and other entertaining subjects. The availability of these subjects has captured many students' attention. For instance, the number of MBBS quotas is reduced by Kathmandu University in Nepal due to the lack of students, whereas arts and management faculties are overcrowded. Similarly, the science universities of Nepal are on the verge of dissolution. Another root cause could be the commercialization. The majority of students are choosing those subjects that need less effort and earn money quickly. Students are focused on money-minded courses rather than courses that need sheer dedication and passion, like science.

Because of this trend, various dangerous and paramount adverse effects may occur. Due to lack of interest in science, there will be less innovation. For example, a smaller number of people will be involved in new drug discoveries. This is the time when the highest number innovation are needed because of environmental issue, pandemic outbreaks, etc.

In conclusion, The study of science has become obsolete because of availability of various alternative subjects and it does have very bad effects on human mankind as science and innovation are very important for the daily life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and effects. The position is clear from the introduction. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While the causes (commercialization and the appeal of creative subjects) are explained, the effects section is less detailed. The example regarding MBBS quotas in Nepal is relevant and adds depth, but the argument that science is becoming 'obsolete' is an over-generalization that weakens the logical progression of the essay. To reach a higher band, ensure that the consequences are explored with more nuance, perhaps discussing the long-term societal impact beyond just 'innovation'.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'For instance', 'Similarly', and 'In conclusion', which help guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the jump from the causes to the effects in the third paragraph is a bit abrupt. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some sentences are quite short, which limits the complexity of the discourse. Overall, the structure is coherent and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, with some attempts at more sophisticated language such as 'detrimental', 'inherently', 'commercialization', and 'obsolete'. However, there are some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'noble discovery' (which is not a standard collocation in this context) and 'money-minded courses'. There is also a minor error in 'human mankind', which is redundant. The range is sufficient to convey the message clearly, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'the highest number innovation are needed' (missing preposition and subject-verb agreement error) and 'because of availability of' (missing article). Punctuation is generally correct, but the capitalization of 'The' in the middle of the concluding sentence is a slip. While the meaning is never in doubt, the frequency of these minor errors prevents the essay from reaching the 7.0 band, as the control over complex structures is not yet consistent.

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