Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries science students are very less in ratio at University level because of many reasons. Firstly, they are eligible to study science subjects in college and lack some other requirements like language barriers English medium and Urdu medium.

In Pakistan, many students studies in Urdu medium as it was national language and easy to learn. While moving to the next level , they face difficulties in words translation in Urdu and these science terms in Urdu are too hard to translate and to learn.

Secondly, many students are not allowed to study science subjects because they are permitted to choose other subjects like business, technology, arts etc.

Thirdly, many families don not allow their child to study at university level. Most of the important reason is that its a very hard and time consuming field. Effects on society varies like, their are less students in science department. No future doctors leading this field. Society is build upon the on of the pillar of educational institutes that serve the society so, any change in this system effects the society directly or indirectly.

Finally, the most crucial point is the emerging technology that changes the path way. Current age is modern age , everything shifted on internet, technology and raising AI tools like google AI, lens, meta AI etc.

Conclusion, decrease in the number of students in science study at university is because if countries cultural and historical factors and the globalization. The modern era is promoting technology and modern tools that access the human needs rather than hardships in sciences. But we should take all the fields equally in society to run it better for future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt—causes and effects—but the development is inconsistent. While you identify factors like language barriers and the shift toward technology, the ideas are often under-developed or lack clear logical links. For instance, the point about families not allowing children to study science is mentioned but not fully explained in the context of modern society. The effects on society are also somewhat vague, focusing on a lack of doctors without exploring broader societal implications. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides a more detailed explanation or example to support your claims.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay uses basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Finally' to structure the response, which helps the reader follow the progression. However, the paragraphing is somewhat disjointed, and the transitions between ideas are occasionally mechanical. Some sentences, such as 'Effects on society varies like, their are less students in science department', lack clear logical flow and cohesion. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points. Improving the use of linking phrases and ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'hard', 'study', and 'subjects'. There are also instances of awkward phrasing or incorrect word choice, such as 'very less in ratio' instead of 'a low proportion' and 'words translation' instead of 'translating terminology'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of vocabulary is not sufficient to demonstrate the flexibility or precision required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to education and societal trends, and focus on using words in their correct grammatical context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('many students studies'), incorrect article usage, and sentence fragments ('Conclusion, decrease in the number...'). There is a limited range of complex structures, and most attempts at complex sentences contain errors, such as 'Society is build upon the on of the pillar of educational institutes that serve the society so, any change in this system effects the society directly or indirectly.' To reach a higher band, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions and articles.

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