Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This statements shows In many country country not enough students are choosing science at university

I am completely agree with this statements It is true statement Most countries many students does not select the science subject for study Many reason behind this problem First of all students at the age of 18 and 20 become dull and unpunctual Not complete work daily and not heed to their study

And parents are not giving attention our childrens

At the universities Teachers and professors are not hard working and does not have the attention to student behind students not enough to study scienece at universities

One more reasons behind the students not choosing to science subjects at universities The universities are not provided all the facilities like leactures seats

Science are very important in modern world for the lake attention to the science danger for his country science every where every time use for benefits And lake of students that's not studied science after the intermediate result also effect her life and country

Many effects does it have on society society became old not not provided facilities that's needed and not acceptable for her country

On the other hand science have many advantages science are also uses every time every where science also use in every country And that's country

And science also effects the society environment and create many problem in the society At the last I say science is very important in every where And science is very use full

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address both the causes and effects of the decline in science students. However, the ideas are significantly underdeveloped and often unclear. For instance, the claim that students become 'dull and unpunctual' is a generalization that lacks logical support or relevant examples. The discussion on effects is fragmented, making it difficult to follow the argument. The position is not clearly maintained throughout, and the response lacks the depth required for an academic task. To improve, you must provide specific, well-reasoned arguments for each part of the prompt and support them with concrete examples rather than vague statements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is non-existent or arbitrary, with sentences appearing as isolated, disjointed thoughts. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, and where they are used, they are often misused or do not link ideas effectively. The lack of transition words makes the text difficult to navigate. To improve, you should organize your essay into clear paragraphs: an introduction, body paragraphs for causes and effects, and a conclusion. Use linking words such as 'furthermore,' 'consequently,' or 'in addition' to connect your sentences and ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. Basic words like 'science,' 'students,' and 'important' are used repeatedly without variation. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'lake of students' (lack) and 'not heed to their study.' The range is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the spelling errors (e.g., 'leactures,' 'scienece') further hinder communication. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to education and societal development, and practice using synonyms to avoid repetition.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The essay contains frequent and severe grammatical errors that often impede meaning. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many students does not select'), sentence fragments, and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is largely ignored, and the sentence structures are simple and often broken. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, you must focus on the basics of sentence construction, specifically ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practicing correct punctuation to separate your thoughts.

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