Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, high education plays avital role in future of all countries in the world, many countries have limited students study science such as Math and Physic, other countries are more concentre of there students to learn sciences. In this essay I will explain the reasons and solutions with my opoinion.

Initially, the main reason of limited students study sciences are need high smarts and intellagents for instance excellent in English lanugch and strong memory, as Professor Elone Mark, social expert said, sciences depand to calculation and smart imagnation. In addition maniory of students can find high score in high secondary schools, as result can enter Medical or Engineering collages. Another reason science study long terms and practiles in realty for instance to be doctor. and Engineering.

Moreover, other reason of study sciences are expensive and request high funding from governments, despite they have limited of public rescoures.

On other hand, there are huge demand of students to study sciences, due to shortage of doctors and Engineerings in the world, and many devloped countries are try to attracive skills from a boards such as England and US. In reference Professor Rose John, education research said , there are limited of doctors and high skill of Engineering in many EU countries, and they work to cover that shortges by magrnation from Asia and African people.

From my prespective view, government should invest more to give oppourtunites to attracive more student for study sciences by some incentives and subsidies.

In conclution, science study is essential for all counties and not enough students to study in university for differents issue such as cost and long terms and physical personal requirments, for that should government encourage students to enter sciences collages and try to cover these shortges of requierment of doctors and engineergs by differents ways, for soical sustainibility.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects), but the development of ideas is limited. While you mention reasons like high costs and academic difficulty, these points lack sufficient explanation or concrete examples. The mention of 'Professor Elone Mark' and 'Professor Rose John' appears to be a generic attempt to provide evidence, but these references are not well-integrated or clearly explained. The essay also confuses the prompt by mentioning 'solutions' in the introduction, which was not requested. To improve, focus on expanding each point with clear, logical reasoning rather than listing multiple ideas briefly. The position is generally clear, but the lack of depth prevents a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'On other hand' is used incorrectly, and transitions between sentences are sometimes abrupt. The logical flow is occasionally hindered by unclear referencing and awkward phrasing, such as the transition between the causes and the effects. While there is a basic attempt at paragraphing, the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs to be strengthened by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that ideas follow a logical progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'avital', 'intellagents', 'lanugch', 'maniory', 'collages', 'rescoures', and 'conclution'. These errors, combined with incorrect word choices like 'high smarts' instead of 'high intellectual ability' or 'magrnation' instead of 'migration', significantly impact the clarity of the text. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the high frequency of spelling mistakes indicate a limited range of vocabulary that is not always used accurately. You should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and improving your collocation skills.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'science study long terms'), incorrect preposition usage, and missing articles. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'many countries have limited students study science'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several sentence fragments and run-on sentences. These errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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