Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It has long been a subject of discussion weather students are choosing to study science at university. In this essay, the formal notion, has several elements that deserve attention and i am partly agree with students choose science stream because it important to our full life depend. Which I will elaborates the upcoming paragraph before reaching the concrete conclusion.

To commence, one of the science stream is very use full for future have many IT sectors. To clear it precisely, in IT sectors have many streams on science. Moreover, For instance, resent new research suggested that many company are prefer science stream students. Which highlighted the importance of many countries students are not choosing science stream at university they have no knowledge of science stream benefits. Hence, the government should provide good knowledge of science stream benefits and have many sectors good package jobs.

Moving on the further, in many countries have not good facilities for study that's reason many students not prefer science stream. To elaborate it, in many university science course fee is too much they students are can't afford this big issues. Furthermore, many university have no teachers to teach about course. For instance, according to recent survey conducted by 55%of people were really happy with , government provide good facilities in universities and low budget course they students can afford. Therefore, the collaboration between government, corporations and citizens are ensure the unified approach to combat they government can't see this problems and students are aware of good study is the issues.

To sum up the effects on society they stop the growth of economy has students are not choosing to study science at university. That should be considered carefully. In this will be important to provide good facilities to students and prefer choose good stream. So that it can be positive outcomes for both individual society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects), but the development is inconsistent. While you identify reasons like high tuition fees and lack of facilities, the explanation is often unclear or repetitive. For example, the section on IT sectors is vague and does not clearly link to why students avoid science. The effects on society are mentioned in the conclusion, but they are not fully explored or supported with logical reasoning. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides a well-developed explanation with concrete examples, rather than listing ideas briefly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing and grammatical errors. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To commence' and 'Moreover', they are often used mechanically or incorrectly, making the flow of the argument difficult to follow. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, in the second paragraph, the transition between the IT sector and the government's role is disjointed. To achieve a higher score, focus on using linking words that accurately reflect the logical relationship between sentences and ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single, coherent theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'good', 'many', and 'science stream'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'weather' instead of 'whether' and 'resent' instead of 'recent'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the precision of your argument. To improve, try to expand your vocabulary by learning collocations related to education and economics, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms. Using more specific terminology would help convey your ideas more effectively and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'many company are prefer'), sentence structure (e.g., 'they students are can't afford'), and word order. Complex structures are attempted but are usually inaccurate, leading to confusion. The punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures before attempting complex ones. Reviewing the use of articles, pluralization, and verb tenses will significantly improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.

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