Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many nations not sufficient students are choosing to study science at university. This essay will argue that this is mainly because of the low interest towards the subject and it require lots of study. Although its major impacts on society is that the slower technological developments and shortage of doctors in the future.

One of the primary causes of the not choosing the science subject is the low interest towards the subject and require lots of study. Nowadays many students in the university are choosing the It subject and commerce subject rather than choosing the science. This is because people have less interest towards the science and technology moreover it require lots of money to study. Another major causes is it requires lots of study while people genereally can't focus on it. Similarly, it have so much complicated chapter that people have to study over the year in a single topic. Meanwhile, people have to study more than 10 hours in a day to became graduated from it where people can't do it. For example, Many students in Nepal are choosing the commerce subject rather than science at university where they don't need to study very much .

The decline in science subject can impact n our society and world as well. As the subject value goes down the technological advancement and development automatically goes down and it effects on people life in the society were they can't see the invention and machines in the upcoming future. Similarly, another major effects shows in a shortage of doctors where due to the less choice of science subject at the university effect in the medical field also. Meanwhile, which decrease in the production of doctors who cure our disease that's affect in the Society and nation as well. For example, Many students of Nigeria chosen the commerce subject at the university which don't produce the doctors in their country where they have to bring it from the another country.

In conclusion, this essay believe this is mainly because of the low interest towards the science subject and require lots of study moreover it impacts on the technological advancement and development and doctors shortage in the future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes (lack of interest, high study demands, financial cost) and effects (technological stagnation, doctor shortages). However, the development is somewhat repetitive. For instance, the point about 'lots of study' is repeated across multiple sentences without adding new depth. While the position is clear, the supporting examples, such as the mention of Nepal and Nigeria, are a bit simplistic and lack the analytical depth required for a higher band. To improve, focus on expanding the implications of these points rather than restating the same ideas in different ways.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Meanwhile' and 'Similarly' are used frequently but do not always logically connect the ideas. There are also issues with referencing; for example, 'it' is used repeatedly without a clear antecedent, making some sentences difficult to parse. The progression of ideas is present but feels somewhat disjointed due to the repetitive nature of the arguments and the reliance on basic transition words.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher levels. There is significant repetition of basic terms like 'subject', 'study', 'people', and 'science'. Some word choices are unnatural, such as 'not choosing the science subject' or 'became graduated from it'. There are also minor errors in collocation, such as 'it have so much complicated chapter'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repetitive phrasing and demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it require', 'it have', 'it effects') and article usage (e.g., 'the science subject'). Some sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'the slower technological developments and shortage of doctors in the future', which lacks a main verb. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the quality.

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