Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Science plays an important role in the development of the growing countries. There is a trend in students to study science subject from all over the passing years. Now in many countries not enough student are selecting to study science at universities. With growing advancements and researches in each sector of study ,there are a vast variety of related branches has present for student to study. All existing types have their own pros and cons over the society.

For example, we shed light over the computer science field. Over the past years, there was only two types related to computer, were existed. The computer science and software engineering. Most of student went from different places to take admission . Only two branches, with a dramatic loads of students. Many of them did not get admission in it and trying to find some other related fields. Now a days, with lots of research and working over it, the new fields; artificial intelligence, computer networks, data sciences, data mining etc. are invented. Students come with their ambitions and interests and get registered within their expecting field.

Similarly, this trend also have been followed within other field like in arts, mass communication and history ect.. Universities try to facilitate students with majority of field. Hence, we saw a dramatic change in number of students who had not selected the science.

On the other side, with the subsequent increase in different field with different number of pupils have a great impact over the society. This bring student out of stress, they feel very courageous toward their studies because they found what they wanted. They bring innovation within that field. Like artificial intelligence, helps blind people to use mobile with voice notes. In the health care sectors now doctors operate patients using the advanced organic medicines that is found with the help of experts in homeopathic and using tools that are manufactured using

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt but struggles with focus and relevance. While you identify causes (e.g., the emergence of new fields like AI), the explanation of why students are choosing these over science is somewhat muddled. The second part of the prompt—the effects on society—is only partially addressed. You mention innovation and healthcare, but the argument is incomplete and ends abruptly. To improve, ensure you clearly separate the causes and effects into distinct paragraphs and provide a more direct link between the decline in science enrollment and the specific societal consequences. The conclusion is missing, which prevents a clear summary of your position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often interrupted by unclear transitions and awkward phrasing. For example, the shift from computer science to arts and history in the third paragraph feels disconnected from the main argument. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'Hence, we saw a dramatic change' or 'On the other side'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow your line of reasoning. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'dramatic loads of students', 'expecting field', and 'passing years'. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'artificial intelligence' and 'data mining', which is positive. However, the repetition of basic words and the misuse of terms like 'organic medicines' (in a context where it seems to mean something else) limit your score. Focus on learning word families and common collocations related to academic and social topics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are a vast variety of related branches has present'), article misuse, and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the incomplete sentence at the end of the text. While the meaning is usually understandable, the density of errors is high. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement and pluralization before attempting more complex structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.