Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
in the recent years , it has been widely observed that , the interest of academics has changed significantly changed and they attracted towards bussiness , II and humanities courses instead of choosing science. It is majorly due to high fees and lot of research and it results in poor facilities in country , lack of skilled workers .
On the one hand ,First and foremost reason behind this trend is prohibited cost. Tertiary education requires exhorbitant amount of money Especially, science and research related courses . most of the student cannot afford this due to financial background. as a result, most of the students deprived from it. secondly,these types of courses needs years of experience and lot of research . So , mainly students try to avoid and choose short term courses from they earn earlier.
Nevertheless, it has numerous downsides on country . predominantly, If students witnessed low interest then country suffered from skilled workers , as people often stay unhealthy due to lack of doctors and nurses. furthermore , country remains far from another countries in the race of scientific research . resultingly, country GDP goes down and suffered from high loss. For instance , one of mine friend choose this field mainly to provide hospitality and happiness to country ignoring high charges .
in conclusion, although theses courses require high fees and years of experience while, theses courses helps to increase in GDP of the country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects), but the development is limited. The ideas are somewhat repetitive and lack depth. For example, the mention of 'poor facilities' and 'lack of skilled workers' is stated but not fully explained. The response is also under the 250-word minimum, which negatively impacts the development of the argument. While the position is clear, the supporting points are underdeveloped, and the conclusion is somewhat disconnected from the body paragraphs. To improve, you should expand on your examples and ensure each point is fully explored to meet the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand', 'First and foremost', and 'in conclusion'. However, the flow is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. For instance, the transition 'resultingly, country GDP goes down' is awkward. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical progression. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between the conclusion and the preceding arguments is weak. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words will help the essay flow more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'bussiness', 'II' (likely meant IT), 'exhorbitant', and 'theses'. There is some attempt to use academic vocabulary, but it is often used incorrectly or in an unnatural way, such as 'prohibited cost' instead of 'prohibitive cost'. The range is sufficient to convey basic meaning, but the frequent errors and lack of precision in word choice prevent a higher score. Focusing on learning correct collocations and proofreading for spelling will significantly improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies on a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentences, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include missing articles ('in the recent years', 'country GDP'), subject-verb agreement errors ('these types of courses needs'), and punctuation mistakes (spaces before commas). While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure hinders the overall quality. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.
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