Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, most of students are reglating to study science at colleges. This is because of lack of opportunities in this sector which is mentioned in an essay.

In one hand, it is expensive to study science at private colleges, due to this many children won't get education in this subject. In other hand, less opportunity in this scope is also the one main reason for not selecting by younsters. For instance, recently passed +2 student can't effort University due to his/her economic background. Also, after graduation job market is limited, that results in unemployment.

Therefore, it has generated several problems in society. Despite having better gardes, students still unable to study science at University. For example, student got above 80% in high school and want to study science for further study but high fees demotivate them. Similarly, graduated adult also have to face unemployment, and perceptions of people towards them also have changed negatively. The government must focus to give access of educations towards science and technologies. Scholership programs should be conducted for learner having excellent marks. This encourage them to learn and motivate towards there work. Budgeting in advancement of technologies and materials should be provied by the country. Different opportunities for gradutes is required. This results in positive impression on society.

In conclusion, student will choose science to study only after the effective solutions are made. Improvement in fees and availablity of work for related field can enhance the learning of students. So, governments play a vital role in solving this rising issue.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes (high costs and limited job opportunities) and effects (unemployment and negative social perception). However, the development is somewhat superficial. The ideas are presented but lack depth or detailed explanation. For instance, the link between 'negative perception' and the student's argument is not fully explored. The essay tends to repeat points about fees and job markets rather than expanding on the broader societal implications. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced analysis of the consequences, such as the long-term impact on national innovation or economic growth, rather than focusing primarily on individual financial struggles.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In one hand' (should be 'On the one hand') and 'In other hand' are used incorrectly. Additionally, the transition between the causes and the effects is abrupt. While there is a logical progression, the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the flow feel somewhat disjointed. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that referencing (e.g., 'this', 'these') clearly points back to the intended antecedent.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'reglating to study' (likely meaning 'reluctant to study') and 'can't effort' (should be 'cannot afford'). Spelling errors like 'gardes', 'scholership', and 'provied' occur throughout the text, which impacts the overall quality. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms to express complex ideas. To achieve a higher score, you should work on using more precise academic collocations and ensure accurate spelling of key terms related to education and economics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there is a high frequency of grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('most of students are', 'student got'), article usage ('the government must focus to give access of educations'), and word form errors ('graduated adult' instead of 'graduates'). These errors are frequent and occasionally make the reader pause to interpret the intended meaning. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of control over basic grammar and punctuation prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency.

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