Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Science is a very crucial and pivotal foundation of knowlegde which peovides essential insights into modern technology, philosophy, society, civilization, evolution etc. Unfortunately many students are not reading science at present at university level. This essay will discuss the causes and effects of omitting science by university students.

Firstly, the root cause of avoiding science in the tertiary education is its complex nature of understanding ; as it requires higher level of conceptuality and clear demonstration. For example, students from many developing countries are not getting the proper laboratory facility to apply their aquired knowledge as a result, they are lacking well understanding of scientific insights. To eradicate this problem, world wide combined scientific approach is needed to foster the facilities for the students. Moreover in age of globalization business and art sectors are flourishing and giving ample opportunities for the students with various lucrative and corporate jobs which delienate the egerness of science among the students. As a result, students are easily choosing to neglect science.

As science is the core knowlwdge of all development, without having scientific expertency, we as a nation can not be able to reach in the level of sheer development and well tech-efficiency. Beacause, this age is considered as the age of fourth revolution where internet is the driving force and without science it will be completely unimaginable to get the benefits of sophisticated technological features like AL,AR,VR,IOT etc. Moreover nowadays it is very common to be dangered by verious kind of epidemic diseases like Corona; In order to get ride of various health related hazards and envioronment disasters scientific knowledge is essential.

In conclusion, all the developments regarding civilizations and universe can be explained and ensured by scientific knowledge. If we want to achieve a comprehensive and worthy nation, we have to foster the development behind the scientific studies by allowing students more opportunities ,inspiration and motivation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: the causes (complexity of the subject, lack of facilities, and the appeal of other sectors) and the effects (hindrance to national development and technological progress). The ideas are relevant and generally well-developed. However, the explanation of the effects could be more nuanced; while you mention the 'fourth revolution,' the link between students avoiding science and specific societal consequences could be more explicitly detailed. The position is clear throughout, and the essay maintains a consistent focus on the topic.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each with a distinct focus. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly,' 'Moreover,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences within paragraphs could be smoother. For instance, the transition between the lack of laboratory facilities and the globalized business sector is a bit abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, but some sentences are slightly disjointed, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'pivotal,' 'sophisticated,' and 'epidemic.' However, there are several spelling errors ('knowlegde,' 'peovides,' 'knowlwdge,' 'beacause,' 'envioronment') and some awkward collocations ('delineate the eagerness,' 'get ride of'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precision and careful proofreading. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more sophisticated vocabulary with greater accuracy and ensuring correct spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While you attempt complex sentences, there are frequent grammatical errors, such as 'we as a nation can not be able to reach' (redundant modal usage) and 'without science it will be completely unimaginable' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors limits the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and avoiding redundant phrasing would improve your accuracy.

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