Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays , many resident believe that , lot of countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university . However , there are causing numerous causes. Moreover , it is causing numerous effect , and my viewpoint will be discussed ensuing paragraph .

To commence with , many individuals believe that students are choosing to study science at university , firstly , lot of countries have a best science university but there are require limited student in university . Most of the big university only prefer skilled student and provide limited seat . For example , if a student with normal percentage , apply best university for addmmitions , many university reject their file due to the low percentage . Secondly , several big university receive a big fees through the student , so several student do no have a big amount of money so they do not study in big university . For instance , If a university charge 13 lakh per years fees a student , to much student will not be able to pay this fees one years , so they do not apply huge university for higher study .

Moving further ahead , there are lot of effects does it have on society , primarily , modern industry depend on only skilled scientist and engineers and technical experts. To explicate , if a country does not have enough such as professionals , company may need to employees workers from other countries or move their research. Secondly ,there may be shortage of quilified big researchers , this can be slow down process in medical areas such medicine, technology , and environmental protection . For example , if few students become medical researchers if may become more difficult to develop new treatments for serious disease.

In conclusion , in my perspective government should provide better opportunities to science student such as sciencetist , skilled professionals and researchers .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and effects. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. The causes provided (university admission policies and high fees) are somewhat narrow and do not fully explore the broader societal or educational reasons why students might avoid science. The effects section is more relevant, touching on industry reliance and medical progress. The position is clear, but the arguments lack depth and rely on repetitive phrasing. To improve, you should expand on the 'why' behind these trends, such as the perceived difficulty of science subjects or career prospects, rather than focusing solely on university administration.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'Moving further ahead' and 'To explicate' are used, but they sometimes feel forced or do not logically connect the preceding and following sentences. There is also a lack of variety in linking words, with 'firstly' and 'secondly' being used repeatedly. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel disjointed at times. Improving the range and naturalness of your transitions will significantly enhance the readability of your work.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'big', 'many', and 'lot of'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'addmmitions' (admissions), 'quilified' (qualified), and 'sciencetist' (scientists). The range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of academic vocabulary and frequent spelling errors prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to education and society, and proofread carefully to eliminate basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is a significant issue. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'there are causing numerous causes', 'university charge 13 lakh'), article usage, and sentence construction. Some sentences are difficult to parse due to these errors, such as 'if few students become medical researchers if may become more difficult'. While the intended meaning is usually understandable, the high frequency of grammatical errors causes some difficulty for the reader. You need to focus on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement to improve your accuracy.

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