Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Science plays an esential role in innovation of distinguish things.Morever,people are not that much getting interest to choose science for their studies,as it has various reasons behind it which I will discuss in coming paragraphs including effects.
To begin with,nowadays many students are getting intrested in other fields such as buisness,law,teacher and so on because of which,students take different stream and make their carriers in that.To illustrate,some students take commerce stream or art stream and become teacher or buisnessmen.Due to this,development of science cannot be occured which can become the reasons of lack of innovation.Morever,fields such as surgeon,nursing,physiotherapist,and so on can be limited,Hence people can be suffered from various illness if doctors number will become limited.
Furthemore,students are not taking science as many students are not that much intelligent to score good marks in their studies.They mainly get low marks because of which they are not able to take science in their highschools even if they are interested in science but since,their marks are low they are not capable to take it.Additionally,it can cause effect on future of society.Healthcare facilities will become limited if the number of students taking science will become limited.Morever,it will also effect on the economic growth as well as development of the country.Hence,it is better to give opportunities to weak students, as in can be possible they will become brilliant after taking science.
In closing,it can be seen that,it can be difficult in future to survive without science, as study science, not only provides innovation in various things, but also provides healthcare facilities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both parts of the prompt: causes and effects. However, the development of ideas is limited. For instance, the argument that students avoid science because they are 'not that much intelligent' is a generalization that lacks depth and academic support. While the essay identifies relevant points like economic growth and healthcare, the explanation of these points is somewhat superficial. To reach a higher band, you should provide more nuanced reasons for the decline in science enrollment—such as the perceived difficulty of the curriculum or the competitive nature of other sectors—and explore the societal impacts with more sophisticated reasoning rather than repeating the same points about healthcare.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'Morever' (misspelled) and 'Hence'. Some transitions feel forced, and the logical progression within paragraphs is occasionally disrupted by awkward phrasing. For example, the transition between the discussion of student intelligence and the impact on society is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence flows naturally into the next would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'distinguish things' instead of 'distinct fields' or 'innovation of distinguish things'. Additionally, there are frequent spelling errors like 'esential', 'Morever', 'intrested', and 'buisness'. The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited, relying on basic terms. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to academic and scientific contexts and pay closer attention to spelling, as these errors occasionally distract the reader from your intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences often contain grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'development of science cannot be occured' and 'people can be suffered'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of grammatical errors—particularly with verb forms and sentence construction—prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on mastering basic sentence patterns and proofreading for common errors like 'can be suffered' (should be 'may suffer') will help improve your score.
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