Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the current age, science subjects play a crucial role in developing field. It is firmly believed that students are not going to select science subjects at university because they consider it a challenging subject. Although they are not choosing this due to leads more hard working, the fee of this subject is much higher as compare to other subjects, so a large number of students are ignoring it.
To commence with,all the the students take their subjects according to their taste. However, most of students face many challenges to improve their marks in it. Furthermore, it needs more effort and hard work, and its high fee courses are responsible for this ignorance. Owing to this, they are not wanted to make their career in this field. In addition, other students get ammpitiating marks with little effort as compare to science group. Therefore, most of students are avoiding to choose this subject.
On the other hand, it is doing much effects on the the society due to the these concerns. To explain, excel results of other students hearting the progress of science group students, and it also hazitates to work hard in this field. Furthermore, our many young ones can not know the facts of surrounding. For example, if we can not effort we also made our mates effortless. Consequently, it has negative impacts on our surrounding.
In a nutshell, if there are not further scopes of this field, so we have to move towards the other options according to our instrust.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt—causes and effects—but the development is limited. While you identify reasons such as the difficulty of science subjects and high tuition fees, the explanation remains superficial. For example, the claim that 'other students get ammpitiating marks with little effort' is unclear and lacks logical support. The effects on society are also vaguely described, with phrases like 'hearting the progress' and 'can not know the facts of surrounding' failing to clearly articulate the societal impact. To improve, you should provide more specific, well-reasoned examples and ensure your arguments are fully developed rather than just stated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often unclear due to awkward phrasing and a lack of logical flow. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To commence with', 'Furthermore', and 'In a nutshell', they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not effectively link the ideas. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the phrase 'due to the these concerns' is grammatically confusing. The internal logic within paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument consistently throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is quite limited and often inaccurate, which hinders communication. There are several instances of non-standard word choices or incorrect collocations, such as 'ammpitiating marks' (likely meant 'impressive' or 'high'), 'hazitates to work hard', and 'instrust' (likely meant 'interest'). The repetition of basic words like 'subjects', 'students', and 'field' suggests a restricted vocabulary. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for the context of a formal essay.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'most of students face' and 'it is doing much effects'. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'if we can not effort we also made our mates effortless'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there are several instances of word-order errors. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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