Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Many individuals don't prefer choosing science and relected courses in many countries.Personnel attaining science ourses at university are falling day by day.This essay will highlight the reason behind it and the impact it leves behind on society.
Some people prefer choosing different cources other then science such as commerce,arts and so on. Some people usually find studying science courses much harder then other available courses.While thers are not completely aware about future scopes in this study.For instance, when at the time of choosing fields they usually are not oriented fully about the avaliable after completing schooling.They simply believe that there are field which only lead to doctors,engineers,pharmacist.The have no proper support or guidance during selection time.So,due to lack of guidance,fear of not being able to pass the courses or their thinking process hold them back from enrolling in science field.
The significant decrease in number of youth enrolling in science studies negatively impact society.There are various means by which it impact society such as drastic reduce in number of nurses,caretakers,doctors,pharmacist and other healthcare fields.Countries like United States of America,Canada,Austarlia,Germany,UAE are facing significant reduction in numder of healthcare workers.They are unable to meet appropiately nurse patient ratio.There are gradual increase in number of citizen geting ill while fall in ratio of healthcare worker caring for peope.Many developed countries are in need of foregin worker from developing countries in order to meet there rising needs.To examplify Canada provides numerous oppertunities through express entry, healthcare draw and various other portal to forigen worker with experience to be a canadian permanent residency care holder in order to meet demands.
In conclusion due to drastic fall in numder of individual choosing science and science related courses after high school graduation.These is adversely impacting society and peoples health by direct or indirect means.However goverment should establish various education seminars and expos in oder to make students aware about avaliable fields.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both parts of the prompt, exploring the causes behind the decline in science students and the resulting effects on society. The writer attempts to develop ideas, such as the lack of career orientation and the shortage of healthcare workers in developed countries like the United States and Canada. However, some arguments lack full extension and suffer from generalisations or abrupt transitions. For instance, the discussion on societal impacts focuses heavily on healthcare professionals, which is relevant but somewhat narrow. The position is clear throughout, and the main prompt requirements are met, placing this response solidly in the band 6 category.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is generally coherent with an overall logical arrangement, though paragraphing and mechanical errors disrupt the flow. While paragraphs are used to separate the introduction, causes, effects, and conclusion, internal cohesion is sometimes faulty. There are issues with referencing, missing punctuation, and run-on sentences, such as 'Personnel attaining science ourses at university are falling day by day.This essay will highlight the reason behind it...' Cohesive devices are used, but their application is occasionally awkward or repetitive. Progression is visible, but the lack of precise linking phrases and mechanical punctuation errors keeps the cohesion at a band 5 level.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to communicate basic ideas about education and healthcare shortages. However, there are frequent spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'relected' instead of 'related', 'ourses' instead of 'courses', 'leves' instead of 'leaves', 'towers' or 'thers', and 'avalizable'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success, and collocation is sometimes unnatural, as seen in 'future scopes' or 'drastic reduce'. These errors do not entirely impede communication, but they are noticeable throughout the text, corresponding to a band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilising subordinate clauses and conditional structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in articles, prepositions, subject-verb agreement, and word forms (e.g., 'citizen geting ill', 'meet there rising needs', 'goverment should establish'). Punctuation is a major issue, with multiple instances of missing spaces after full stops and missing commas in complex sentences. While communication is not totally obscured, the density of errors places the grammar firmly at a band 5 level.
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