Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In many countries mostly students choose to study in daily life experiences university instead of science universities because now a days working class societies are popular a person who works lot he got lots of money and enjoy his life. Science doesn't work in real life and don't give a common man so money. For example chinies choose to teach their students mostly about daily life works ways of business and marketing. These type of works are really very useful for our society every one has a competition with himself for gaining more money, living good life making comfortable homes better than others. And it's really very necessary for this generation, because iff anybody who has no idea of works he is the most ugliest man in society no one like to talk to hin so that's why for making a good impression in society they have to do something that makes him well managed person

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 156 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely restricted. While the student attempts to address both causes of the decline in science students (such as the focus on making money through business and practical work) and effects on society (such as social standing and the pursuit of wealth), these ideas remain underdeveloped and superficial. The explanation regarding societal impacts becomes disjointed, focusing heavily on personal impressions rather than broader societal consequences. Because the length requirement is significantly unmet and the explanation remains truncated, this performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptors for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single, continuous block of text, which severely hinders the logical flow of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, resulting in run-on sentences and a lack of clear progression. For instance, sentences are strung together with repetitive conjunctions or punctuation errors rather than transitional phrases. While the reader can broadly discern the writer's topic shift from causes to effects, the structural organisation is faulty and lacks a clear overarching framework. This corresponds closely to Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and occasionally strained, limiting the precision of the argument. Phrases like 'daily life experiences university', 'real life', and 'ugliest man in society' demonstrate a limited range of vocabulary and inappropriate word choices or collocations. Spelling and word-form errors, such as 'chinies' instead of Chinese and 'iff' instead of if, further restrict clarity. Although the writer attempts to introduce less common topics related to business, society, and personal impressions, the lexical limitations and inaccuracies mean the vocabulary is barely adequate for the task, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The submission displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound sentences that contain frequent errors in punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and clause connection (e.g., 'a person who works lot he got lots of money'). Run-on sentences are common, and attempts at complex structures frequently break down grammatically, causing strain for the reader. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors that occasionally distort meaning and the very limited control over complex structures, the writing falls into Band 4.

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