Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?
Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
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Overall, the adults spent most of their time working and sleeping in both years. Adults who love goint out with friends and family, has decreased significantly over the time.
In 1958, 33% of the adults spent most of their day working, while in 2008, the proportion increased considerably to 42%. The proportion of adults who love going out with their friends and family was 19% in 1958, fell dramatically to just 6% in 2008. Other activities to spent overall time in 1958 was sleeping sharing 32% fell behind to working by just 1%, after 50 years it decreased to 25%.
Relaxing at home shares 8% while travelling to work and plying sports shares other remaing time which is 2% and 8% respectively in 1958. In 2008, proportion of adults spents 8% of the time relaxing at home, 7%each travelling to work and playing sports.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
The student has failed to address the given task prompt regarding university science students, and instead written about a completely different topic concerning time use depicted in pie charts. Furthermore, the response suffers from a significant length penalty, containing only 168 words against the required 250-word minimum. Because the essay is entirely off-topic for the assigned question and severely under-length, it falls well below the standard descriptors for Task Achievement, earning a band score of 3.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
Although the text is divided into paragraphs, the overall organisation is disrupted by the inclusion of random keyboard characters at the very beginning of the response. The logical progression is weak, and cohesive devices are used clumsily or repetitively, such as 'In 1958' and 'In 2008'. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing between sentences is occasionally confusing. Based on these limitations, the coherence and cohesion match a band score of 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with several awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'adults who love goint out' and 'other activities to spent overall time'. There are noticeable spelling errors ('goint', 'spents', 'remaing') and limited flexibility in lexical range. However, the meaning remains mostly discernible despite these flaws. This performance aligns with a band score of 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but frequent grammatical errors impede accuracy. Examples include tense inconsistencies and awkward relative clauses, such as 'The pie charts compares the difference in proportion on how working adults...' and 'The proportion of adults who love going out with their friends and family was 19% in 1958, fell dramatically...'. Punctuation is also lacking in places. These persistent errors correspond to a band score of 4.0.
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