Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

MAJORIETY OF COUNTRIES NOT ENOUGH SCHOLARS ARE CHOOSING TO STUDY SCIENCE SUBJECT AT UNIVERSITY . THERE ARE MANY REASON BECAUSE SCIENCE SUBJECT DIFFICULT AND SOME STUDENTS DISLIKE . THEY CAUSES NEGATIVE EFFECTS ON SOCIETY.

ONE OF THE MAIN REASON IS THAT STUDENTS ARE NOT CHOOSING SCIENCE SUBJECTS . THIS IS BECAUSE SCIENCE SUBJECTS ARE VERY DIFFICULT . MANY SCHOLORAS FELL THIS IS A TOUGH SUBJECT AND NOT EASILY UNDERSTAND THE ACADEMIC SUBJECT EASILY . THE SCIENCE SUBJECTS INCLUDE VERY TOUGH SUBJECTS SUCH AS PHYSICS , CHEMISTRY ,AND MATHMATICS .FOR EXAMPLE , STUDENTS NOT LEARN THIS SUBJECT BECAUSE THIS SUBJECTS INCLUDE MANY CONCEPTIONAL QUESTIONS AND MORE DETAILS . AS A RESULT , MANY STUDENTS DISAPPONITED BECAUSE TEHY DO NOT LERAN AND GIVE FULL CONCENTRATION ON THIS SUBJECTS .

THE SECOND REASON IS TAHT MANY UNIVERSITY OFFER VARIOUS DISCIPLINE . THIS MEANS THAT UNIVERSITY DEPARTMENT OFFER MANY COURSES . STUDENTS HAVE DIFFERENT OPPORTUNITY TO CHOOSE ANY COURSE ACCORDING TO THEIR TASTE . SOME STUDENTS DONOT LIKE SCIENCE SUBJECTS . FOR INSTANCE ,MANY UNIVERSITY OFFER ARTS AND ENGLISH SUBJECTS . THEREFOR, MANY STUDENTS CHOOSE ACADEMIC SUBJECTS ACCORDING TO THEIR TASTE .

THE CAUSES NEGATIVE EFFECT ON SOCIETY BECAUSE STUDENTS NOT LEARN SCIENCE SUBJECT . UNIVERSITY NOT PROVIDE MORE DOCTORS AND SCIENTISTS . AS A RESULT , THEY CAUSES NEGATIVE EFFECT ON THE ATMOSPHERE .

IN CONCLUSION , THE SCIENCE SUBJECT VERY HARD AND MANYSTUDENTS NOT TAKE INTERESTED TO LEARN . THE UNIVERSITY OFFER DIFFERENT ACADEMIC SUBJECTS SO STUDENTS LEARN AND TAKE PART

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses both parts of the prompt (causes and effects on society), but the development is very limited and repetitive. For instance, the causes are stated simply as 'science subjects are difficult' and 'universities offer other courses,' while the effects are vaguely mentioned as 'not provide more doctors and scientists' and a negative effect on the atmosphere. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 250-word minimum by one word (containing 249 words), which requires a minor penalty under task achievement rules. Ideas are under-developed, and the argument lacks sufficient elaboration and relevant examples. This performance aligns best with Band 4.0 descriptors, where tasks are responded to minimally and ideas are inadequately supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The essay attempts a paragraph structure, introducing causes and effects in separate sections. However, the logical progression is weak and ideas are disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'ONE OF THE MAIN REASON IS THAT' and 'AS A RESULT'. Paragraphing is partially utilized, but individual paragraphs lack clear internal cohesion, often consisting of disconnected simple statements. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall organization fails to guide the reader smoothly through a coherent argument. This sits comfortably within the Band 4.0 level, where information is not arranged in a fully coherent manner and logical progression is absent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'science subject', 'students', 'difficulty', and 'society'. There are frequent word-choice errors, such as 'MAJORIETY' instead of majority, 'SCHOLORAS' instead of scholars, 'FELL' instead of feel, and 'CONCEPTIONAL' instead of conceptual. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for discussing academic topics with precision. While meaning can generally be extracted, the sheer frequency of lexical errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing prevents the response from achieving a Band 5.0. It firmly reflects Band 4.0, characterized by basic and repetitive vocabulary with frequent errors that strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that result in severe grammatical errors, such as 'THERE ARE MANY REASON BECAUSE SCIENCE SUBJECT DIFFICULT AND SOME STUDENTS DISLIKE' and 'THEY CAUSES NEGATIVE EFFECTS ON SOCIETY.' There is a persistent lack of subject-verb agreement, missing auxiliary verbs, incorrect verb forms ('TEHY DO NOT LERAN'), and punctuation errors. Error-free sentences are rare, and meaning is frequently distorted or obscured by faulty grammar. This corresponds to a Band 4.0, where structures are extremely limited and frequent errors impede comprehension.

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