Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Students not intersted to study science at university in many countries.this eassay will discuss reasons for this and aslo how it effects the society.

The primary reason for this is science subjects are tough to understand.if they study easy subjects in the university they can complete their degree within the time and can achive good job to support family finacially.however,science subjects contains hard topics which are very difficult to understand .in addition,exams are also not easy to get good marks .so,it is very difficult to get job if student has backlogs .due to this,many studuents chosing to study other fields instead of science.other reason is less job openings.after graduating from the university there are very few jobs in the market moreover,there is tough compitetion in the society for that few jobs and many people were still unemployed those who studied science in university.hence, students are avoiding to purse science.

The first effect is shortage of skilled doctors in country.if student neglect studying science then students cant gain knowledge on the subjects realted for becoming doctor.so,

In conclusion,hardness of subject and less job vacciences are the main reason for not choosing science.shortage of skilled doctors and less

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the prompt minimally, identifying causes such as difficulty and job scarcity, and an effect like a shortage of doctors. However, the ideas are under-developed and incomplete, particularly as the essay trails off unfinished in the second body paragraph and conclusion. Furthermore, it must be noted that the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 196 words. This severely limits the depth of coverage for both causes and effects, restricting the score to a lower band where the task is only partially addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation with distinct paragraphs attempted, but the overall progression is disrupted by the incomplete nature of the response and abrupt ending. Cohesive devices are basic and sometimes inaccurate, such as repetitive use of lowercase letters at the start of sentences and the absence of full stops in places. Paragraphing is initiated, but the final paragraphs are cut off prematurely, preventing a logical flow of ideas throughout the essay. Referencing is basic, leading to disjointed transitions between causes and effects.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and word form that cause some difficulty for the reader. Examples of lexical limitations include 'intersted', 'eassay', 'finacially', 'compitetion', and 'vacciences'. The student attempts some less common terms related to university and careers, but these are marred by inaccuracies. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate for expressing simple ideas, but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures with frequent errors. There are persistent issues with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'science subjects is tough' and 'student neglect'. Punctuation and capitalization are largely neglected, with sentences frequently starting without capital letters. While some simple sentences are understandable, frequent errors in basic grammatical patterns and the inability to maintain control over complex structures cause difficulty for the reader.

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