Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The enough students are not choosing to study science at University in many countries it is a affect the county growth and future. The science and technology is a important subject in ourlives because nowadays a science and technology are use in all the places. We can say that without the education of science we are survive the days.

The enough students are choosing the science subject it may cause the country development and growth. This may also affect the next generation and education level. We can say that the science is one kind of magic which exist in earth.

When the not enough students are choose the science may also damage the fields of the technology. The centre of science and technology has a shortage of employees. When the people are may not have in the work area the its damage our country development.

The society may also affects when the science and technology has disturbed. Nowadays the machines and internet are very important thing individuals life without that the people are more crazy. The science are use every places like in education, electricity, communication, work places etc. without the science may all the work are discontinued or stoped which Major affect the county as well as the society.

Thats why the conclusion is the science and technology has more important in all places thats what the not enough students are choose the science may affect the countrys growth, development and bright future. The students may choose the subject like science is a more important thing for the inhance the countys future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify a relevant effect: a shortage of science graduates could weaken technology-related work and hinder national development. You also mention consequences for society, such as disruption to communication, education and electricity. However, the task asks for causes as well as effects, and causes are barely addressed. The opening mainly states that science is important, rather than explaining why students avoid studying it; the response therefore answers the question only minimally. Several effects are repeated in broad terms, such as damage to “country development,” without a specific example or explanation of how the shortage produces them. To strengthen the response, explain plausible causes—such as difficult coursework, limited career awareness or better-paid alternatives—and develop each effect with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has separate paragraphs and a recognisable beginning, development and conclusion. Its ideas generally remain connected to science education and its possible consequences, and phrases such as “When” and “Thats why” attempt to link points. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the causes-and-effects structure is not clearly established, and several points repeat the same claim about national growth. Some sentences are joined in ways that obscure the relationship between ideas, particularly the opening sentence and “When the people are may not have in the work area the its damage our country development.” Use one paragraph to explain causes and another to explain effects, with each paragraph organised around a distinct point. Clear topic sentences and more precise links would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a basic set of relevant terms, including “science and technology,” “shortage of employees,” “communication” and “development,” so the general subject is identifiable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which sometimes strains understanding. For example, “the science is one kind of magic” does not explain a cause or effect, while “the people are more crazy” is unclear in this context. There are also inaccurate word forms and collocations, such as “inhance the countys future” and “the science are use.” Build a more precise range for discussing education and employment, and check spelling and natural word combinations. Replacing vague claims with terms such as “qualified graduates” or “career prospects” would help express the argument more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences using links such as “because,” “when” and “without,” showing some effort to vary sentence structure. However, control is weak: errors are frequent and at times distort the intended meaning. Examples include “The enough students are not choosing,” “it is a affect,” and “the science and technology are use,” which show problems with sentence formation, articles, agreement and verb forms. The sentence beginning “When the people are may not have” is especially difficult to interpret. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention, as several ideas run together. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time and check verb forms and agreement.

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