Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In this rapidly evolving world contribution of science has always played an major role in terms of technology , engineering , and many more. In recent study it is been observed there is a downward trend in amoung students regarding opting science at university. eventually resulting in minimal develpoment towards mankind due to manpower in science stream depicts perpectual fall.

There is a common misconception towards science as a subject, its tough to understand and difficult to solve. Eventually, this stereotype leads creating fear in students, Without understanding and pratically performing. My reasoning states , students never compeletely understood the basic concepts of science, thus creating confusion. Clearing the basic and understanding the basics eliminates the misconception and develops an urge to know more. A friend of mine use to find physics tough in 10 grade and usually ask me to explain and clear out topics to him , when i explained his the basic of physics and formulas he found it very easy and took science as a major in 11 and 12 grade.

Society is developing at a rapid pace and its adequately important to create a manwoper which can withstand problems and figure out solution. If we lack sufficient manpower develpoment will slowdown. Invention in field of computers, engineering such as mechinical and civil, bio-tech advancement, and many more will lead to a pause.

In conclusion, students are scared to study science at university must give it a chance after clearing out their basics, larger the people in field of science the more it contributes toward GDP and humanity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you identify fear and misconceptions about science as a cause, then explain that a shortage of skilled workers could slow development and innovation. The example of your friend helps illustrate how stronger foundations can change a student’s attitude. However, the causes are narrow: the response focuses mainly on difficulty understanding science and does not explore other plausible factors, such as career perceptions or teaching quality. The effects are also stated broadly—“development will slowdown” and advances may “lead to a pause”—without explaining specific consequences for people or society. Your conclusion offers advice to students, but the response would be more complete if it developed the social effects with concrete examples and made the links between causes and outcomes clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on effects, and a conclusion. This makes the main direction easy to follow, and phrases such as “In conclusion” signal the ending. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear or mechanical. For example, “Eventually” is used to connect ideas without showing precisely how one leads to the next, and the sentence beginning “My reasoning states” interrupts the explanation rather than smoothly extending it. The effects paragraph lists fields such as computers, engineering, and biotechnology but does not organise them into a developed chain of consequences. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports; also check that pronouns and references have clear antecedents.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “misconception,” “manpower,” “basic concepts,” and “bio-tech advancement,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the reader pause. For instance, “minimal development towards mankind” and “a pause” do not express the intended social consequences naturally; “manpower development” is also an imprecise way to describe the supply of skilled science graduates. Spelling errors such as “develpoment,” “amoung,” and “mechinical” further reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural phrases and proofread spelling. Replacing broad expressions with specific terms for skills, research, innovation, and public benefits would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some longer structures, including the conditional idea “If we lack sufficient manpower, development will slow down.” However, attempts at more complex sentences are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to read. Examples include “it is been observed,” “A friend of mine use to find,” and “when i explained his the basic,” which show problems with verb forms, tense, and sentence construction. Articles and agreement also need attention, as in “an major role” and “students … must give it a chance.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly around sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each sentence for complete structure and correct verb forms.

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