Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Science that has been playing ital role in the development of world by advancement in technologies and othey aspects of life of human being and living things. In Several countries

students are not showing interest for the study of science at universities.In my view there are only few institutes around world which are shaping students by providing advance facilities in respective field.

There are alot of issues which has been creating hurdles for students to get admissions in universities for science studies.Firstly Teachers who have not experienced in a field work, as for that many students think twice before.Another issues job securities that may have stopped them, However in many countries people are not much able to earn in such fileds because of government lackness in a way not budgeting for any research centers.

Although it consequences can drag society ,for example in india there are not research centers that help people to gain knowledge , as for that people are not much able to understand about the rules of this world,there for we can see in animals they are not healty because of food consumptions that put them towards weakness and also the same issues faces human being because there doctors are not able to understand the deasese and their problems .

To sumup i would recommend taht it is necesseries for institutions to understand science before enrolling and must develope research centre in thier countries.It is the only way people will take interest for studying science and learn about it .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both causes and effects, and your position is visible in the recommendation that institutions improve science education and research facilities. The causes you identify—limited facilities, inexperienced teachers, and poor job security or government funding—are relevant. However, the response only partially develops these points: for example, it does not explain clearly how teacher experience affects students’ choices, or how weak employment prospects discourage them. The effects section focuses mainly on health and research in India, but the link between fewer science students and these outcomes is not fully explained. Some claims, such as animals becoming unhealthy because people lack scientific knowledge, need clearer reasoning or a specific example. Develop each cause-and-effect link more fully and keep the conclusion focused on the effects as well as solutions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on effects, and a concluding recommendation. This helps the reader identify the main sections. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are joined in long, loosely connected sentences. For instance, the effects paragraph moves from research centres to public understanding, animal health, and doctors without clearly showing how each point follows from the previous one. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “However,” and “therefore” are attempted, but some are used inaccurately or do not establish a clear relationship. Use shorter sentences, organise each paragraph around one main point, and make references such as “it” and “that” explicit so the reader can follow your reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “advancement in technologies,” “research centers,” “job securities,” and “government” budgeting. This shows an effort to discuss education, employment, and scientific development. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make meaning unclear, such as “government lackness,” “fileds,” and “deasese.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “take interest for studying science” and “understand the rules of this world.” Spelling errors are frequent enough to distract the reader, and repeated general words such as “issues” and “people” reduce precision. Build a more accurate set of topic-specific expressions and check spelling and collocations; for example, describe “limited career prospects” or “insufficient research funding” directly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “Although it consequences…” and a cause-and-effect explanation using “because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation make some relationships hard to understand. Examples include “issues which has been creating,” “there are not research centers,” and the opening fragment beginning “Science that has been playing…”. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly in the effects paragraph. Work first on producing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check singular/plural agreement and article use. Breaking long sentences into shorter units will also help you control grammar while retaining some complex structures.

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