Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In recent years lot of countries many students are not liked to accepting to study science subject at university. However this essay will discuss the main cause and solutiiion why students are not choosing to study science subjects .

First and foremost in this essay which we discuss the main cause of students are less like science subjects . The main cause this essay science subjects is tough then other subjects , and students like to choosing arts subjects as well as arts subjects easy than science , and students easy available good marks and they easily pass . Sometime in the universties and colleges have not teachers of science subjects , and students are not preparing of his exams course and the final they are fail . Furthermore the bigest cause of this essay the fee of science subjects is differ than other subjects , and the ratio of admission is very high than arts subjects and students not apply and not liked the science subjects .

However, the main solution of this the admission are same to same than arts subjects and students easily choosing science subjects . As well as the ratio of admission are same to same arts subjects , and provide all of these facilities for students , as wekk as universities and collages delivered good teachers for students . Additionaly the main solution of this essay they focus a lot of students than arts students and students easily pass and liked science subjects.

In order to a recapitulate , the main causes and solution of this essay students are choosing science , when unversities not focus on science subjects students and they do not work hard and the result students are failed . The main solution they focus they work hard students are liked and loved science subjects .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify several plausible causes, including science being perceived as difficult, a shortage of science teachers, and higher fees or admission requirements. However, the task asks for the causes and effects on society, while your response mainly discusses causes and then proposes solutions. The effects are not explained: for example, you could discuss how fewer science graduates may limit medical research, technological innovation, or the supply of skilled workers. The conclusion also shifts to what universities should do rather than summarising the social consequences. To improve, address both parts directly and develop each main point with a clear explanation or relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

Your response has separate paragraphs and uses signposting such as “First and foremost,” “Furthermore,” and “In order to” to show movement between points. This gives it a basic overall structure. However, progression is weakened because the body moves from causes to solutions, and the requested effects are absent. Several linking phrases are repeated or do not clearly express the relationship between ideas, such as “As well as” and “Additionaly.” Some sentences also combine several points without clear connections, making the argument difficult to follow. Organise the essay around causes and societal effects, with one focused paragraph for each, and use linking words only where they accurately show how ideas relate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “science subjects,” “universities,” “teachers,” “admission,” and “fees,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “students are not liked to accepting,” “easy available good marks,” and “same to same.” Spelling errors, including “universties,” “bigest,” and “Additionaly,” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise range for discussing education and social outcomes, and learn common collocations such as “choose to study,” “meet admission requirements,” and “a shortage of qualified teachers.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt longer sentences and use some subordinate structures, including “when universities not focus on science subjects” and “students are not preparing of his exams course.” However, sentence patterns are limited and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur frequently. For instance, “students are not liked to accepting” does not form a correct verb pattern, while “the main cause … is tough” has an unclear subject and comparison. Several sentences join clauses with “and” without establishing a clear grammatical relationship. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex forms using “because,” “which,” and “as a result.” Check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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