Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

In recent years, it has been observed in many countries that not many students are willing to opt for science streams in universities. In my opinion this could be attributed to the fact that science itself is a very demanding domain and needs a pinch of curiosity which is not being instilled in students of the current generation.

One of the main causes for this observed decline could be the factor that teachers are unable to pique their disciples' interest in the science domain. There are many methods to teach effectively and it is a teacher's responsibility to keep their students engaged in their repsective subjects. Furthermore, another contributing factor could be the higher cost of education for science-based streams. Since, science itself is a very demanding field, therefore setting up labs where students can perform experiments and collaborating with industry personnel for real-world exposure needs funds. The students have to bear the brunt of these funds in the form of course fee and application fee which might degrade their morale to study the subject. Moreover, job opportunities are also a major concern for science-based streams which generally require a Master's degree or even a PhD for an actual high paying role.

Lesser number of scientists or eligible researchers adversely affects our societal aspects. Researchers are the individuals who have the potential to bring new innovations to existence, just like how Graham Bell's invention led to telephones and Tesla's invention of alternating current. However, a society without innovations has low room for imagination and improvement, people would have no one to look upto. I personally am an machine learning enthusiast and look upto Andrew Ng's work, similarly with declining number of scientists society would lose its true role models along with gifted individuals who can cotribute to teh society by who creating who knows what.

In conclusion, school's should emphasize more on creativity and regularly hold science fares so that students can be exposed to the wonder of creativity. Furthermore, universities should also provide scholarships which will motivate students who are willing to study science to take up the stream. Since, these researchers are the future of the and harbringer of a brand new and better world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address both causes and societal effects, and your position is clear: limited teaching engagement, high study costs and uncertain career pathways discourage students, while fewer researchers may mean less innovation and fewer role models. The examples of Bell, Tesla and Andrew Ng help make the effects concrete. This meets the task well, but the causes are developed more fully than some effects: the claim that society would have “low room for imagination” and “no one to look up to” is broad and would benefit from a clearer explanation of practical consequences, such as slower medical or technological progress. The conclusion introduces school science fairs and scholarships, but these recommendations are not required and do not fully resolve the discussion. More precise support for each effect would strengthen the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, one on effects, and a conclusion. Sequencing is generally logical, and signposts such as “Furthermore,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the argument. The causes paragraph moves from teaching to costs and then employment prospects in a sensible order. However, some linking is mechanical, and the effects paragraph becomes difficult to follow near the end: “similarly with declining number of scientists society would lose…” combines several points without clearly separating them. The conclusion also shifts from effects to recommendations and ends with an incomplete-sounding thought. Use clearer topic sentences and divide complex claims into distinct steps, with pronouns and references that make each connection explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You show an adequate range and attempt less common vocabulary, including “contributing factor,” “real-world exposure,” “innovations” and “adversely affects.” These choices help discuss education and society, though some are unnatural or imprecise in context. For example, “a pinch of curiosity” is an awkward collocation, “disciples” is not the natural term for students, and “degrade their morale” does not clearly express discouragement. There are also spelling errors such as “repsective,” “cot ribute” (written as “cotribute”), “teh” and “harbringer,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural academic phrasing rather than ornate expressions, and proofread spelling and word forms. This would make your vocabulary more flexible and controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex structures, including subordinate clauses and cause-and-effect sentences, and the main ideas are generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, sentence boundaries and punctuation. Examples include “I am an machine learning enthusiast” (article agreement), “school’s should” (incorrect apostrophe and plural form), and “Since, science itself is…” where the comma after “Since” is unnecessary and the clause is left awkwardly connected. The final sentence, “Since, these researchers are the future of the and harbringer…,” is incomplete and obscures the intended meaning. Practise checking each sentence for a complete main clause, correct articles and agreement, and use punctuation to separate independent ideas. Greater accuracy across complex sentences would improve control.

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