Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In my opinion, in many countries a lot of students are not like to study science subjects at university level.There are many reason behind this, for example in Pakistan a lot of students are not studied at university level because they like to earn money.Morever,we can say that there are many reasons behind this,for example many students pressurize by their parents to earn money in the childhood.furthermore we can say that many of the students are not continued their study because these students are not financially supported by their parents.These are the main reason in many countries,thats why these students are not choosing science subjects at university level.In my opinion this is the major issue in many countries because they dont want to study science subjects because they wanted to earn money.In the last we can say that these are things effects our society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify a possible cause—financial pressure to earn money—and mention that some students lack parental support. However, the response does not clearly explain why students specifically avoid science, and the effects on society are barely addressed: the final sentence only says that “these are things effects our society” without naming any consequences. The Pakistan example is introduced but not developed with relevant detail. The response therefore addresses the task only minimally, with ideas that remain limited and under-explained. It is also substantially below the required minimum length, which leaves too little space to explain both causes and effects. To improve, explain each cause and show specific social consequences, such as shortages of scientists or slower technological progress, using a relevant example for each.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the issue, lists possible reasons, and ends with a brief reference to effects. Linking expressions such as “for example” and “furthermore” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several points repeat the same claim about students wanting to earn money, and the effects section is not developed into a clear part of the argument. The response is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the causes and effects are not separated. Some connectors, including “In the last,” do not clearly signal the relationship intended. Organise the answer into an introduction, a paragraph explaining causes, and a paragraph explaining effects; use linking phrases only where they clarify the connection between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “study science subjects,” “financially supported,” and “earn money,” so the general topic is usually understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive: “many students,” “many countries,” and “reasons” recur without much variation, and some phrases are not natural in this context, such as “pressurize by their parents” and “these are things effects our society.” This limited range makes it difficult to express precise causes and consequences. Build topic vocabulary for university study and society, such as “pursue a science degree,” “financial constraints,” “career prospects,” and “shortage of skilled researchers.” Check collocations and spelling as well; for example, “Moreover” is misspelled, and “in the last” is not an appropriate phrase for concluding an argument.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to connect clauses using “because” and “that’s why.” Errors in verb forms and sentence construction are frequent, although the reader can generally identify the intended meaning. For example, “students are not like to study” should be “students do not like studying,” while “many students are not studied” needs a different structure, such as “many students do not attend university.” In “many of the students are not continued their study,” the passive form is incorrectly used; write “many students do not continue their studies.” There are also problems with agreement and punctuation, including “many reason” and missing spaces after full stops and commas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled complex structures.

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