Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many people think that countries not enough pupils are selecting to study science at university. The major reason to students can hard to understand to science topic and it needs to higher cost to study. The effects of society it might less reseacher to find new things.

Many students are not intreasing in scince sudies becuse it really needs to high IQ person only understand these experiement and it very expensive tution fee. Students have strong scene of hummer about experiements and every situation they can do solve problem as well as patience level also importance. Although many people have great knowleage about scince field, they do have enough resources and expensive university admission. For example, according to recent reports show in annunal years half of the students drop out because they do have enough cost to try new innovation and less support from their parents.

It can be direct effects by the society mostly developments sectors and less reseacher to find new technology. It might direct impact person life and countries economy. Many countries are spending their budget in science and technology to the new innovation. So those university and lecutres jobs might be gone. Then it direct effects other students who chooses science subjects. For instance, in Nepal, many elite IQ students go to the abroad for study because there are not available good infrastrucure. Those students are settle in the abroad and never comeback their country.

In conclusion, pupils are not choosing science study at university becasue expensive university xosts and less intreast in science. It might effect society and there development and country future.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, and the Nepal example gives the discussion a relevant, specific detail. The causes you identify—difficulty with science and the cost of study—are on topic, while the effects include fewer researchers, slower technological development, and skilled graduates leaving their country. However, these points are only partly explained. For example, the claim that science requires a “high IQ” is asserted rather than supported, and the link between fewer science students and university jobs disappearing is unclear. The conclusion repeats the main points but does not clarify their consequences. Develop each cause and effect with a clear explanation or example, and make the relationship between them more precise so the response addresses the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for causes and effects, and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main sections, and phrases such as “For example” signal supporting details. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some connections are difficult to follow. In the causes paragraph, the discussion moves from intelligence and patience to resources and tuition without clearly showing how these points relate. The sentence beginning “So those university and lecutres jobs might be gone” does not follow logically from the preceding point about national spending. Some linking expressions are also awkward or repetitive. Organise each paragraph around one main idea, then explain it before adding an example; use clear references to show how each sentence connects.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “science and technology,” “innovation,” “researcher,” and “infrastructure,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts to express more specific ideas, such as students going abroad and not returning. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, including “strong scene of hummer,” “high IQ person,” and “direct effects by the society.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “scince,” “experiement,” and “infrastrucure”—also distract the reader. Build a reliable set of phrases for discussing education, costs, and social consequences, and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise, natural combinations such as “tuition fees,” “shortage of researchers,” and “brain drain.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea (“it might…”) and a subordinate clause beginning “because.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and agreement sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “countries not enough pupils are selecting” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “it needs to higher cost” and “Those students are settle in the abroad” contain faulty patterns. Several sentences also join ideas without clear grammatical links. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add clauses using “because,” “although,” or “which.” Check articles and verb forms when revising each sentence.

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