Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The deliberately of choosing a career the student will persue and the course he'll take to fulfil the requirements of such career has always been the one of foundations of the education system but not many of those knowledge seekers choose pure science as a course and a career to go after.

In fact there's so many reasons why this particular pattern occured. First this path can seem difficult for some students due to crucial pre-aquisations such as a solid foundations of maths and physics and other feilds which without this prior knowledge this path can be impossible to finish.

Another reason that maybe can repulse the university students to persue this kind of career is the vague future of it to further explain we need to understand that our needs in terms of day to day expenses are increasing and the fact that such career can be challenging to bring money home quickly unless the student is brilliant and have the confidence that he can invent or add something to the feild which can occur of coirse but the majority of students don't think it's the case.

And another reason can be that even though the title of scientist can be attractive but students especially this generation of students which im among don't feel passionate about the feild.

And no one can argue that this phenomenon is huge danger sign for the world can cause immense damage to society which live and develop through the inventions and the breakthroughs of scientist

So the lack of scientists will definitely mean a slower pace of development in terms of technology because every what we call advanced technology we aquire today is the result of many scientists breakthroughs and ideas tgat translated into those phones and powerful computers we use in our daily life and other forms of technology we ease our lifes with.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both causes and effects, and the response gives relevant reasons: science may require strong prior knowledge in mathematics and physics, offer uncertain financial prospects, and fail to attract some students’ interest. You also identify slower technological development as a social consequence. However, the discussion is only partly developed. For example, the point about students lacking passion is asserted but not explained, and the effect focuses almost entirely on technology rather than exploring wider consequences for health, industry, or problem-solving. The opening is difficult to interpret as a clear position, and the conclusion does not fully draw together the causes and effects. Explain each main idea with a specific example and make the overall argument clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a recognisable sequence from causes to effects, and phrases such as “First” and “Another reason” help signal the list of causes. However, the response is largely presented as one continuous block, so the shift from causes to social effects is not clearly marked. Several sentences are very long and contain multiple ideas, particularly the discussion of financial prospects and the final sentence about technology; this makes the progression difficult to follow. Linking phrases such as “And another reason” are repetitive, while some connections between claims are unclear. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, causes, effects, and conclusion, and organise each paragraph around one main point with clear links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “pure science,” “pre-requisites,” “breakthroughs,” and “technological development,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the reader pause. For instance, “the deliberately of choosing a career” does not express the intended idea, and “bring money home quickly” is informal and imprecise in this context. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “persue,” “occurred,” “feild,” and “aquire.” Aim for accurate academic phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for employment prospects, scientific research, and social consequences would make the argument clearer and more convincing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentence forms, including explanations introduced by “due to” and “unless,” but these structures are often faulty or difficult to follow. For example, “First this path can seem difficult … such as a solid foundations … which without this prior knowledge” combines an incomplete construction with unclear clause links. Agreement and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “the majority … don’t think it’s the case” following a long, unclear sentence and “he can invent or add” after “the student.” Missing or inconsistent punctuation, especially in long sentences, further obscures meaning. Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with clear subjects and verbs. Check articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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