Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries not enough learners are choosing to study science at university because of various resion and problems. It does bad effect on society and nation.

One of the main resions, they are not choosing science because they are not perticularly intrested in science even other subjects.In addition, they are just want to earn money by working and enjoying life and they thinking study is waste of money and valuable time. For example, in last 2 years ago I had passed my 10th grade and I stated my study as a science and I recently just passed my +2 grade. Now, sometime I fell regret about if I did not choose sciense, I enjoy my life and can earn money. It is the big essue for future the county because it cause unemployment and uneducated. It may be reduce the economic growth and unstability.

Secondly, some students can not afford to pay university fees because their families poor. I have watched, differents student who wants to study sceince, but because of they poor those students have no better ways to leave study and do work and earn money to improve family conditions. Moreover, some students beleive that study make us only workers and they do not want to work under the boss or manager. It is the effect of social media, when influncer illustrates their lifestyle by trading or another easy works. It makes bad effect in society. For example, people cheating on their friends and families,

In conclusion, main reason of student do not choosing science becuse of they think it is waste of time and another is social media by the influencers. it cause fighest with friends and relatives, student shows aggresive with teachers, unequility and produce crupted people in society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both causes and effects, and your examples about financial hardship and students being attracted to income from social media are relevant. However, the response only partially fulfils the task because the effects on society are not consistently explained or linked to the shortage of science students. For instance, unemployment and reduced economic growth are mentioned, but the connection to fewer science graduates needs to be made explicit. The conclusion introduces conflict, aggression and corruption without showing how these outcomes result from the issue. Your personal example explains a change in attitude, but it does not clearly support the wider argument. Develop a clear central position and explain each cause-and-effect link with a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “One of the main reasons,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” help readers identify the sections. However, progression within and between ideas is not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from lack of interest to earning money, then to your personal experience and several social effects, without clearly connecting these points. In the second paragraph, financial barriers and social-media influence are combined, and the example about cheating is left without explanation. Some linking phrases, including “Moreover” and “For example,” introduce ideas but do not establish their relationship to the main argument. Group each cause and its related effect together, and use clear references and transitions to show how one point leads to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “economic growth,” “unemployment,” “university fees” and “social media,” so the reader can generally identify your subject. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word form and collocation are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to understand. Examples include “resions,” “intrested,” “unstability,” “fighest” and “crupted people.” Phrases such as “study is waste of money” and “easy works” are also imprecise or unnatural. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and word combinations carefully. More precise expressions such as “financial barriers,” “career prospects” and “a shortage of science graduates” would help you explain your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some simple sentences and attempt longer structures with “because,” “when” and “if,” but complex sentences are often faulty, and grammatical errors occur frequently. For example, “they are just want to earn money” combines incompatible verb forms, while “some students can not afford to pay university fees because their families poor” is missing a verb in the second clause. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent in “I had passed my 10th grade” and “it cause unemployment.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly where a new idea follows a full stop or comma. Practise forming complete clauses, maintaining consistent tense, and checking subject–verb agreement and articles before adding more complex structures.

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