Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In most of the countries students are choosing to study subjects other than science. in this essay we will discuss the causes of this and effects on society.

The major reason for students not to choose science is very limited facilities at universities. This happens in most of the third world countries. Almost all the universities do not have enviroment for science studies Even labs are not upto the mark and can not provide the inventory for research in science projects. Science as a subject does not get attention in schools that is at basic level. So, students build interest in other traits. As a result not enough students study science which creats inbalance in the society. Another reason for not taking science is that governments allocate far less than it should be. So, students know that they will not be looked after even if they study science and exell in this.

The major effect of students taking other courses instead of science is that it creats inbalance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify two relevant causes: limited university facilities and insufficient government funding. The examples of poorly equipped laboratories and weak science teaching help explain why students may lose interest. However, the task asks about effects on society, and this part is barely addressed: “it creats inbalance” is repeated without explaining what becomes unbalanced or how society is affected. The response therefore addresses the question only partially, and the ideas remain limited and under-developed. The required minimum of 250 words is not met, which also restricts the opportunity to explain and support your points. To improve, develop several specific social consequences, such as shortages of scientists, slower medical or technological progress, or greater reliance on expertise from abroad, and connect each effect clearly to the causes.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: an introduction, a paragraph explaining causes, and a final statement about effects. Linking expressions such as “The major reason,” “As a result,” and “Another reason” help show relationships between ideas. However, the response does not develop a clear overall progression: the causes receive most of the discussion, while the effects are reduced to one repeated claim. The final sentence does not extend the argument or provide a conclusion. Some connections are also unclear, particularly the move from limited facilities to students choosing “other traits.” Use separate, purposeful paragraphs for causes and effects, and make each paragraph progress from a main point to an explanation and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “facilities,” “universities,” “research,” “allocate,” and “society,” so the reader can understand the general subject. There are also attempts at more specific phrases such as “labs” and “science projects.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “build interest in other traits,” “provide the inventory,” and “creats inbalance.” Spelling errors such as “enviroment,” “upto,” and “exell” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe students as “developing an interest in other fields” and refer to “adequately equipped laboratories.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate some ideas through simple sentences and make attempts to connect clauses, as in “So, students build interest in other traits.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. The opening has an incorrect sentence boundary and capitalisation: “science. in this essay.” In “governments allocate far less than it should be,” the pronoun does not agree with the plural subject, and the comparison is incomplete. The sentence beginning “Science as a subject” also needs clearer punctuation between its clauses. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete comparisons, and sentence boundaries. Then combine simple sentences with controlled subordinate clauses to explain causes and effects more fully.

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