Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, in the world many countries face problume that students are not select science while they study at university. There are some causes of happning that students are not choosing science and also that consequences on society. This essay discuss both.

One mejor reasion is that too challenging for students. This is becouse science have very large syllabus and techanical subjects. Students know their capecity. If students choos sciens at university forcing by parants, they could be fail in subjects. For example, science have very large syllabus and many subjects relavent to physic, chemistry and biology. As a result students can not acchive their goals and their dreams. Another reasion is field of intrust. Many students have their diffrents goals and intrust. They want to become a businessman and work in bankig department. Therefor they choos a subjects or feild that help them to become a businessman or a banker such as managment. For instunce, to becom a CA students want to study BBA. For that reasion students can not choos science.

If students can not choos science at university then there are some consequences that can face society. One mejor effects is shortage of skilled workers. Critical sectors like helthcare and engineering and reserch sector are face many difficultys. A lack of science graduates slow down technological advancements, and sutable solutions needed to tackle global challenges like climete change.

In conclusion, difficult curricula and career uncertainties deter students, leading to shortage of innovation and slowed societal progress. Governments and educational institutions must take some actions and find some effectiv solution.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both parts of the question: you identify challenging science courses and students’ different career interests as causes, then explain that fewer science graduates can create shortages in healthcare, engineering and research and slow technological progress. These are relevant points, and the conclusion briefly brings the causes and effects together. However, the ideas are only partly developed. The claim that science is challenging is repeated through references to a large syllabus, without explaining in detail why this discourages students. The career-interest example is also unclear: studying BBA does not clearly show why a student would avoid science. The societal effects are more briefly covered than the causes. Develop each point with a clearer explanation and a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph on causes, a paragraph on effects, and a conclusion. This makes the main direction easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “For example,” “As a result,” and “In conclusion” to signal relationships between ideas. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “For that reason students can not choose science” does not clearly follow from the example about becoming a CA and studying BBA. The causes paragraph also moves between difficulty and career interests without a strong transition. Use clearer topic sentences and make each example explicitly support the point before moving to the next idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “skilled workers,” “technological advancements,” “global challenges,” and “climate change,” which helps communicate the main ideas. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors make the writing less clear, such as “problume,” “happning,” “capecity,” and “difficultys.” Some word combinations are also unnatural, including “field of intrust,” “shortage of innovation,” and “find some effectiv solution.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to understand your meaning. Build accuracy with common academic collocations and check spelling carefully. For example, use “a shortage of science graduates” and “develop effective solutions” rather than the less natural phrases in the conclusion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including conditional structures such as “If students choose science at university forcing by parents, they could be fail in subjects” and a result clause beginning “As a result.” However, the complex attempts are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction frequently affect clarity. For example, “This essay discuss both” needs a correctly formed verb, while “science have” and “are face many difficultys” show problems with agreement and verb structure. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical construction. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; check that each sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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