Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Recent IELTS Exams (Canada & India) · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries not enough students are choosing to study science at university. What are the causes of this? What effects does it have on society?

Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Most of nations pupils are adopting a medical proffesion at the academic institutions. i firmly beleive that they had any particular keen interest at those subjects. Although, there main causes and reasons are given below.

To begin with, there are multifarious reasons are behind them, the main concern is that any individual choose science field, due to their specific interest. whereas science proffesion helps childrens to do many scientific reasearches. in this way they mainly develop the habit to new experiment in the laboratories because it may provide them a proper infrastructure of invented a new things. To illustrate, in the year of 2009 toma university in the canada conducted a research and got that 99% students are choose science study because of the their heavy interest in that field

Another specific reason demonstrates that, it provides students higher carrer options. stduents got big advantages from this moreover they got a schlorships and the big universities offer letter dur to medical proffesion because, every proffesion needs a good healthcare workers which mainly helps in the development of nation and the finicial critieria, eventhough medical proffesions provides big pacakge to their employees which helps in the individual growth and it also enhance value of person about their charachter and their profession

According those reason, the main effect of the science studies is that if most of teenagers got medical seats than in the upcoming time there is shortage become of the another proffesional field like in enginner, or other trades so, it drastically effect the academic system additionaly, students can stuck in trap and, because only few of the persons become doctor . i belive that society needs all types of the skill workers not only healthcare proffesionals

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response4.5
Coherence and Cohesion4.5
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address both causes and effects, but the discussion does not consistently answer the question about too few students choosing science. The opening instead claims that most pupils are choosing a medical profession, and the causes paragraph says students choose science because of interest and career opportunities—ideas that do not explain the stated decline. The effects paragraph does identify a relevant consequence: shortages in engineering and other trades if too many students enter medicine. However, this point is only briefly explained, and the response does not clearly establish a position or develop the causes and effects with reliable, relevant examples. Focus on why science enrolment is falling, then explain specific consequences for society and support each point with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt at paragraphing, with separate sections for reasons and effects, and signposts such as “To begin with” and “According those reason” help indicate the intended structure. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because the opening introduces a claim about medical professions that conflicts with the task, and the reasons paragraph moves between interest, research, laboratories and career benefits without a clear sequence. Linking expressions such as “moreover,” “because” and “although” are sometimes used in ways that do not show the intended relationship. The final paragraph contains a relevant effect but combines several ideas in a long, confusing sentence. Give each paragraph one clear purpose and connect each supporting detail directly to its main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts some topic-related vocabulary, including “scientific researches,” “laboratories,” “career options,” “healthcare workers” and “professional field.” This gives the reader a general sense of the subject, but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning unclear. For example, “medical profession” is repeatedly used where the task concerns science study more broadly, while “big package” and “got a scholarships” do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “proffesion,” “reasearches” and “enginner” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of terms for university science enrolment, career prospects and workforce shortages, and check spelling and common word combinations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example with “because” and “if,” but these structures are often faulty, and control of basic sentence forms is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in “there are multifarious reasons are behind them” and “99% students are choose science study.” Articles and plurals are also frequently missing or misused, as in “a new things” and “a scholarships.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries make the final paragraph especially difficult to read, with several ideas joined by commas. Practise forming accurate simple sentences first, then add one subordinate clause at a time; check subject–verb agreement, articles, plural forms and full stops during revision.

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