Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people make choices about work, education and where they live in the hope of building a better future. Everyone wants to be rich as it provides opportunities.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern world,every person have many opportunities for choose their future career.In the modern world, people do anything that they want to do in their life as compare to previous world.At this time people are independent for choosing their work,education and future career.

I will agree with the given statement that many people make choices about their work and their are many examples of people choices their work by own.In the previous world,the parents of the children decides what the children have to do but in the modern world people are independent for choose their work that they have to do in the future.People think they will become a doctor because they like to become adoctor in future.The aim of the person is to become a doctor and they are independent to choose their career.

Many people also make choices about what they study in the future.Every person have freedom to choice their education so the person the subjects that they like to study and fullfill their aim.People also make choices where they live in the future in the modern world people thinks that they live in this type of building in the future.Every person are free to choice the building where they live.

In this world,every person wants to be rich because it provides opportunities.If the person become rich they have many opportunities to become more rich.In the modern world, their are choices to become rich.For example, the modern technology provides to much data for gaining money.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a position—“I will agree”—and refer to work, education, place of residence, and wealth, so the response is connected to the prompt. However, it mainly repeats that people can choose freely, rather than explaining whether becoming rich is desirable because it creates opportunities. The examples about choosing to become a doctor and selecting a building do not clearly support your view about wealth, and the final point about technology is not explained. The task asks for reasons and relevant examples, so develop a few direct arguments about how wealth expands opportunities and include a specific example. The response is also one word below the required minimum.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, discussion of work and education, and a final paragraph about wealth. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the progression is limited because the first three paragraphs largely repeat the idea that people are free to make choices, and the connection between those choices and the claim about wealth is not made clear. Linking phrases such as “In the modern world” recur frequently, while some sentences run several ideas together without clear punctuation. Organise the body around distinct reasons that support your position, and use transitions to show how each reason relates to the question rather than repeating the same framing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “career,” “education,” “independent,” and “opportunities,” and the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is narrow, with repeated words such as “future,” “choice,” and “people,” and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural. For example, “freedom to choice” and “provides to much data for gaining money” make the intended meaning less clear. Spelling and word-form errors such as “fullfill” and “adoctor” also affect accuracy. Build a wider set of precise terms for discussing wealth and opportunity, and check collocations and spelling so your ideas can be expressed more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate mainly through simple statements and make some attempts to join ideas, but the range of sentence structures is limited. Errors occur frequently in agreement and verb forms: “every person have,” “the parents … decides,” and “people thinks” should use matching plural or singular forms. There are also problems with infinitives and articles, as in “for choose” and “become adoctor,” and punctuation is often missing after introductory phrases or between clauses. These errors do not prevent the reader from following the general topic, but they make the writing less controlled. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add a few correctly formed complex sentences to explain reasons and examples.

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