Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people make choices about work, education and where they live in the hope of building a better future. Everyone wants to be rich as it provides opportunities.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

People decide to take good education, better professional career and sometimes they are going to live different place for building a better future. These are the ways they can be rich in future and that brings different opportunities. I am not fully agree with that everyone wants to be rich in future.

People always try to get the good education and for that reason they want to go to best institutions. For a child, parents find out the good school, collage or university . Sometimes these institution can be unaffordable for their family and sometimes it can be far away from their home. But, Parents always try for the best one, because they know better education can make their children a good human being . For a better profession people choses to do hard work, as well as people prepare themself for that works which demand is really high in the market. For example, IT is the most demanding profession nowadays and they are paying highest. So, All are get into it.

For better education and better working opportunities people are moving from one city to another, and they are hoping that it can open lots of options in future. So that they are leaving their parents, leaving house where they brought up. As well as many people move to town area because they believe , in city area they will find their dream job and they will earn a lot. In contrast, Everyone doesn't do these activities to become rich or everyone doesn't want to become a wealthy person. Most of the people think, become a good human being is more important in life as well as their must be proper respect from people and they will lead a simple life. Being a rich person can brings hassle sometimes and their personal wellbeing and health can be hampered. For example, When a person become rich he need to give more effort and time to his business or work, it may hampered his family time, as well as he can't look after his health properly , though he have lots opportunities to leads a luxury life.

In conclusion, People do have different choices for building a better future but everyone doesn't want to be rich though it can provides different opportunities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you disagree that everyone wants to become rich, while recognising that education, career choices and moving for work can offer opportunities. The discussion is relevant and includes examples, such as parents seeking good schools and people moving to cities for jobs. You also explain that some value being a good person and a simple life, and that wealth may affect health and family time. This covers the task well, with some development beyond a basic response. However, parts of the first two paragraphs describe how people pursue education and work without fully explaining whether their aim is wealth or a broader future. Develop that distinction and support the claims about wellbeing with a more specific example to make the argument more consistently convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas generally progress from education and work to migration and differing life priorities, and linking phrases such as “For example,” “In contrast” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For instance, “So that they are leaving their parents” does not clearly show how the preceding point leads to this consequence, and “So, All are get into it” interrupts the explanation of the IT example. Repeated use of “better” and “people” also makes the progression feel less controlled. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each example explicitly to your position; check that pronouns and linking phrases refer unambiguously to the intended idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for the topic, including “professional career,” “demanding profession,” “personal wellbeing,” “wealthy person” and “luxury life.” These choices allow you to discuss education, employment, migration and the costs of wealth. However, several word-choice and collocation errors make the expression less natural, such as “take good education,” “best one” for an institution, “town area,” and “hassle” in this context. Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “better” and “people,” and spelling or word-form slips such as “collage” and “brought up” reduce precision. Aim for more accurate topic collocations and vary repeated terms; this would make your meaning clearer and more fluent without requiring unnecessarily advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “because,” “though” and “when,” and the overall meaning is usually understandable. There are, however, some recurring errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. For example, “I am not fully agree” should be “I do not fully agree,” while “Being a rich person can brings” has an incorrect verb form. In “he need to give more effort,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “everyone doesn't” is an awkwardly formed negative. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent, particularly after commas and full stops. Review subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for articles and punctuation. More accurate control of these structures would strengthen the range you are already attempting.

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