Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Many people make choices about work, education and where they live in the hope of building a better future. Everyone wants to be rich as it provides opportunities.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

To my own understanding education is the key and its a starting point for everybody both adults and children need to be educated to able to work and earm good salary and sort your monthly bills,I can still work while studying,Lets say I work part time while I am doing my master's degree in psychology at university of Manitoba Canada,after two years am done with my master's then I can now work full time job,And still earn higher than my old colleague, In that the same company,Or better still i can own a company while studying for business administration at university of lagos in Nigeria,I love education so much and my husband too..My husband is ready to sponsor till any level of education i want and i am ready for my PhD in computer Science,I am the managing director of our company right now,yet every saturday I dont miss my lectures because going to that school has improved our company more and more everyday andy husband is so happy that he is not wasting his money on me because we have value of the money we are spending, Honestly I am advising everyone else who care to listening,that education is the key to success and knowledge,I promise my kids all of them will study first before business or working,My mom always told me how education made her lost everything in life, because she couldn't read or write,her father is not rich to train her in school,yet this man married 6 wives and 28 children non of then went to school..my opinion is that education is best that can happen to anybody in this life

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your response presents a clear preference for education, especially through examples of studying while working and applying learning to a company. These examples are relevant to the broader idea of building a better future. However, the question asks whether everyone wants to be rich because wealth provides opportunities, and your essay does not clearly state whether you agree or disagree with that claim. It focuses mainly on education as a route to success, without explaining whether being rich is necessary or whether people may value other goals. The personal examples are also not consistently linked back to the question. State your position directly, then develop reasons and examples that specifically address wealth and opportunity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains several related examples, including your studies, your husband’s support, and your mother’s experience, so a reader can identify a general theme of education. However, the ideas are presented in one long sequence with almost no paragraphing or clear progression. Connections such as “Lets say,” “And still,” and “Or better still” do not establish a clear argument, and the shift from your own education to your mother’s story is abrupt. The conclusion repeats that education is best but does not draw together a developed answer to the question. Organise the essay into an introduction, separate body paragraphs, and a conclusion, using clear links between each reason and your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for discussing education and work, including “master’s degree,” “managing director,” “sponsor,” and “knowledge.” These terms help convey personal examples and show some range beyond very basic language. However, many expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “education is the key,” “work full time job,” and “value of the money we are spending.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “earm,” “everyday” where “every day” is intended, and “non of then,” are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Aim for more precise language about financial opportunity, such as income, career prospects, and financial security, and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express complex ideas, for example by describing how you could study while working and how education has affected your company. However, the response relies heavily on long, joined sentences, and attempts at complex structures are often difficult to follow. For instance, “I can still work while studying,Lets say I work part time…” runs several clauses together without appropriate sentence boundaries. There are also frequent errors in verb forms and sentence construction, as in “need to be educated to able to work” and “after two years am done.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, which further obscures meaning. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine ideas with accurate subordinate clauses and consistent punctuation.

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