Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Advances in communication technology have made it easier for people to stay in touch, but they have also weakened the quality of personal relationships.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In this contemporary era communication technology has become wide spread across the world. As most of individuals use electronic gedgets to communicate with each other but some individuals argue that this has weakened thier intra-personal relationships. However, I agree with the former school of thought.

To begin with, one significant reason is, one can be contacted in the case of emergency. in the case of emergency it is really important to contact concered individuals as soon as possible. Additionally, it can be the matter of life and death for some individuals for instance when a child who live far away get sicks his/her parents can be contacted easily to ask of any pervious allergies and medication so that proper treatment can be given. Moreover, it has become important thing to have in the era we live in.

Furthermore, another reason is we can contact anyone whenever we want. post when electronic gedgets to communicate use to be thing individuals were contacted using a postcard or a letter by post. In addition to this it use to take days to contact someone which hamper the bond between individuals for instance when we need to contact a friend who lives really far it might take days for a reply to come. hence, now a days individuals can be contacted on the daily bases which increases bond

However, now a days life is on a fast pace and no really have time to meet someone on the daily basis. I believe that communication technology increases the bond with other individuals as we can talk on call or video call when ever we get time in our lives whereas there is a lot of planing which goes behind if we want to meet someone for instance i can call my friend on the daily basis whereas meeting the same person on daily bases can be challanging

To conclude, one can be contacted in the case of emergency and now a days life is on a fast pace and no really have time to meet someone on the daily basis are the reasons why individuals use communication technology whereas life is on a fast pace and no really have time to meet someone on the daily basis using

electronic gedgets increases bond.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is that communication technology strengthens relationships, and you give relevant reasons: it enables contact in emergencies and makes regular communication easier. The example of parents being contacted about a child’s allergies helps illustrate the first point. However, the response only partly addresses the question because it gives little consideration to the claim that technology may weaken relationships; the paragraph about busy lives mentions difficulty meeting in person but does not explain the possible negative effects of digital communication. Several ideas are also under-developed, and the conclusion repeats earlier points rather than clearly summarising your extent of agreement. To improve, state your position precisely in the introduction and develop each reason with explanation and a specific example, while acknowledging and responding to the opposing view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposting such as “To begin with” and “Furthermore” shows an attempt to organise the argument. However, progression is not consistently clear: the third body paragraph shifts to the lack of time to meet without clearly connecting this to the earlier points, and the conclusion repeats a long, confusing version of the same idea. Some linking phrases are repetitive or awkward, including repeated uses of “in the case of emergency” and “now a days.” The sentence beginning “post when electronic gedgets…” is difficult to follow and interrupts the paragraph’s logic. Use one clear main idea per paragraph, connect examples explicitly to that idea, and make the conclusion concise rather than repeating whole phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “communication technology,” “emergency,” “medication,” and “video call,” so the reader can generally understand your subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated, particularly “individuals,” “contact,” and “bond.” There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice problems, such as “gedgets,” “thier,” “concered,” and “pervious,” as well as unnatural phrases like “on the daily bases” and “life is on a fast pace.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Build a wider set of accurate expressions for relationships and communication, check spelling carefully, and learn common collocations as complete phrases rather than translating them word by word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and subordinate clauses, for example the sentence about a child who lives far away and the parents being contacted. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. The opening “As most of individuals use electronic gedgets…” is a dependent clause presented as a complete sentence, while “when a child who live far away get sicks” has errors in subject–verb agreement and verb form. Other examples include “no really have time” and “which hamper the bond,” where the subject and verb do not agree. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, especially after full stops. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using correct subjects, verbs and punctuation.

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