Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the percentages of male and female workers across five employment sectors in 2012 and 2022.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table compare the proportion of man and woman workers across 5 job sectors in 2012 between 2022.

Overall, it can be clearly seen that the highest number of men worked under construction, whereas in the same year lowest number of female represent work of construction. The number of least of male that work of health and social care this year while, highest number was female work of health and social care in same year.

male worker in 2012 work of construction was maximum number 94% and female same these work lowest number of female workers. construction of work, male workers were slightly fell in 2022 while, female workers same work were number of worker some rise. Manfacturing and retail male workers in 2012 year, to big difference 78% and 48% in same year strength of female

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify several important patterns: construction has the highest male share, while health and social care has the highest female share, and you note that construction’s male proportion fell by 2022. However, the report is incomplete and the overview is not fully clear. The opening says the figures are “in 2012 between 2022,” and the response stops while discussing manufacturing and retail, without summarising the remaining sectors or giving a complete comparison of both years. Some details are vague, such as “some rise,” rather than reporting the change from 6% to 10% for women in construction. The response is also 13 words below the required minimum. Develop the overview and select accurate comparisons across the sectors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an opening, an overview and a detail paragraph, and “Overall” signals a summary. However, progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or left unfinished. For example, the overview repeats the construction and health-sector extremes, while the final paragraph ends with “in same year strength of female” without completing the comparison. Linking words such as “whereas” and “while” are used, but the relationships between clauses are often unclear. Use one concise overview, then group the detailed comparisons logically—for example, male-dominated sectors first and female-dominated sectors second—and ensure each sentence expresses a complete point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “sectors,” “construction,” and “health and social care,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “worked under construction,” “lowest number of female represent work,” and “some rise” are not natural ways to describe percentages. There are also spelling and form errors, including “Manfacturing” and “male worker.” Choose precise reporting language such as “accounted for,” “share,” “increased,” and “declined,” and use it consistently. Avoid repeating “number” when the table reports proportions rather than counts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including clauses joined with “whereas” and “while,” but control is inconsistent and errors frequently obscure the intended relationships. The opening, “The table compare the proportion,” has subject–verb agreement and number errors, while “in 2012 between 2022” does not form a clear time expression. In “male workers were slightly fell,” the verb construction is faulty, and several sentences lack a complete grammatical structure, especially the final phrase. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise accurate simple comparison sentences first, then combine them with clauses: for example, “The male share in construction fell from 94% to 90%, while the female share rose from 6% to 10%.”

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