Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

People see Advertising in more places than ever before, including on phones, public transport and streets. This is now a normal part of daily life for many people.

Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The data demonstrates that nowadays people see advertising in various places more than ever before with such types, namely, phones, public transport and streets and now people are get use to it because its become a part of their daily life.

I fully disagree with this statement because its affect on our society very badly and its out comes are very dangerous.

Begine with first reason like how its affect our society.

By watching advertising on mobile phones affect people savings which they are save for their monthly use. For example, if a man's salary is 30,000 rupees and his households expenses are 25,000 and he just able to save 5,000 rupees only for future crisis like medical, education and road accident. But then he suddenly watch a advertising video on his phone and he was not able to resist himself from purchasing it because the advertising companies use a tricky or catchy technique to stuck new customers. Thats how he spend his savings there and after realise this that product was not necessary for him. Then he have to borrow a loan for any kind of an accident. Thats how its affect on our society.

Furthermore, second reason is about what kind of dangerous affects we are facing nowadays.

First one its change public perspectives related clothes with the help of social media. For example, these textile industries are using social media influencers to promote their products because of their huge fan following. So, they wear their clothes and show them to public and then a girl or boy who could not ever afford these clothes then they commite sucide unfortunately. This is happening because if they are not wearing these clothes then their friends, relatives and even teachers troll them and passing bad comments on them. So just for save theirselves from these ha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position against the growing presence of advertising and give two relevant lines of argument: impulsive spending and pressure to follow clothing trends. The salary-and-savings example helps illustrate the first point. However, the response only partially develops the task: it does not weigh advantages against disadvantages, and the opening says you disagree with “this statement” without clearly stating whether you mean advertising is a normal part of life or that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages. The second example makes a serious claim about young people and suicide but does not explain its scale or support it sufficiently. State directly that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages, briefly acknowledge a benefit, and develop each reason with clearer, more measured evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction and two body sections, and signposts such as “Furthermore” help show that a second reason is coming. However, progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs rely on formulaic announcements—“Begine with first reason” and “second reason”—rather than clear topic sentences and connected explanation. Several links are unclear, including the move from influencers’ clothing promotions to bullying and then suicide. The final sentence is cut off at “these ha,” leaving the second argument and the essay without a conclusion. Use one focused paragraph per main idea, connect examples explicitly to the claim, and finish with a concise conclusion that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “advertising,” “savings,” “influencers,” and “promote,” and the examples make your intended meaning generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repetitive choices make parts difficult to understand: “dangerous affects,” “tricky or catchy technique,” and “troll them and passing bad comments” are not expressed precisely. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “Begine,” “out comes,” and “commite.” Aim for more precise collocations and avoid repeating “affect” and “how.” For example, describe advertising as “encouraging impulsive purchases” and social pressure as “ridiculing people for their clothing choices.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt longer sentences to explain cause and effect, particularly in the example about a person’s salary and savings, but complex structures are often faulty and errors occur frequently. Examples include “people are get use to it,” “its affect on our society,” and “he suddenly watch a advertising video”; these show problems with verb forms, agreement, and articles. The sentence beginning “By watching advertising on mobile phones affect people savings” also lacks a clear grammatical subject. Some sentences are understandable, but the repeated errors make the reader work to follow the argument. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “so,” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence boundaries during revision.

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