Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-08-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
SOUTHWEST AIRPORT
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Before the development there is no clear pathways for people who arrive on airport , they do not have option for atm nor they can hire a caror sit in a cafe. These facilities are very crucial for a person when arriving in another place while the departure area also lacks facilities like bag checking area. By the picture i can see there is no sky train the gates areas which can cause people to have rushy environment and lacks discipline. This structure of the airport is less developed and can't compete to the modern style airport which are need of this time .
Whether from picture i can see the airport having all the facilities which a person needs from having proper ski train bag checking points in departure area , proper cafe, check in point and also shops between the check in are to ski train which lead to more gates than before as well as we can see a propet atm , hiring transport service , waiting area like cafe while before development both areas were have the same gates while after development the arrival and departure area have their different gates to get out without any rushy environment which leads to discuple a nation needs.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear summary of the visual information. Instead of objectively describing the changes, the text includes subjective commentary, such as 'this structure of the airport is less developed and can't compete'. The task requires a report on the main features and comparisons, not an evaluation of the airport's quality. While some features like the sky train and shops are mentioned, the lack of a clear overview and the inclusion of irrelevant personal opinions significantly detract from the task requirements. The response does not effectively highlight the key differences between the two plans.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into two paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The transition between the 'before' and 'after' descriptions is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as the awkward opening 'Whether from picture i can see'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two maps. The overall structure lacks the necessary flow expected in an academic report, and the connection between sentences is often mechanical or absent.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of non-standard word choices, such as 'rushy environment' and 'discuple', which impede clarity. The student relies on basic terminology and struggles to accurately describe the features of the airport. There is no attempt to use more sophisticated or precise vocabulary relevant to describing maps or urban development. Frequent errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'no clear pathways for people who arrive on airport', demonstrate a lack of control over the language required for this task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure meaning. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there are errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'in another place' and 'the gates areas'. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with poor control. The frequent errors in basic grammar, combined with the lack of complex structures, make the text difficult to read and understand at times.
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