Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 16 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

SOUTHWEST AIRPORT

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The schemes illustrate place of airport current and after that it will demonstrate show after development next year it totally will changed after flourished and become more beautiful . with undeveloped southwest airport before there are eight walkway after well development there will 18 walkway and magnificient number and 2 walkway after that it will sky train furthermorev it great numbers increase and dramatically changed . before development there is one cafe after that there is two number changedand one check point and after that one same ratio check point beforte there is one number departures and after that therev is two departures and arrivals also double after that development there is one cafe and one atm machine for ease for passengers and also car hire also changed and also one bag drop therev is fascinayed and amazing changing and more advanced and well adapted and well flourished

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad comparison between the airport now and after redevelopment, and you mention several genuine changes, including the increase from eight to eighteen gates, the sky train, an additional café, an ATM, car hire and bag drop. However, the response reports these features inaccurately or unclearly: the gates are not “walkway,” and departures and arrivals do not double. The main changes to the concourse shape and the relocation of check-in are also missing. The overview is difficult to identify, and comments such as “more beautiful” and “amazing” do not describe the plan objectively. The response is also two words below the required minimum. To improve, give a clear overview and accurately describe the most significant changes in location and facilities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to compare the two stages, using phrases such as “before development” and “after that,” and the response follows a broadly chronological order. However, the ideas are crowded into one long, loosely connected sequence, so the reader cannot easily distinguish the overview from details about departures, arrivals and the concourse. Connectors such as “furthermore” and repeated “also” do not show clear relationships between the points, while unclear references such as “one same ratio check point” interrupt progression. Organise the response into short paragraphs: first summarise the main redevelopment, then describe the terminal and concourse changes in a logical order. Use linking words only where they clarify a comparison or addition.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some task-related vocabulary, including “sky train,” “ATM machine,” “car hire” and “bag drop,” so the reader can recognise several facilities. However, vocabulary is basic, repetitive and often inaccurate for describing a plan. “Eight walkway” confuses the walkway with the gates, while “magnificient number,” “fascinated” and “flourished” are not suitable descriptions of airport redevelopment. Repeated phrases such as “after that” and “changed” also limit precision. Choose neutral, specific terms for locations and changes, such as “concourse,” “relocated,” “extended” and “added.” Check spelling and word forms, and avoid subjective praise; the task calls for factual reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response mainly uses simple clauses and attempts to link them into longer sentences, but frequent errors in sentence structure and basic grammar make several points difficult to follow. For example, “The schemes illustrate place of airport current” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “there are eight walkway” has problems with article use and number agreement. Tense and verb forms are also unreliable in “it will totally will changed,” while missing punctuation creates run-on sentences throughout. These errors sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, using present tense for the current plan and future forms for the redevelopment. Add full stops to separate each main feature.

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