Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-07-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are planning a business trip to another city. You will have some free time to do some sightseeing while you are there.
 

Write a letter to a friend who lives in the city you will visit. In your letter:
• explain the purpose of the trip.
• ask about things to do and see in the city.
• invite your friend to do something with you during your visit.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Kartik,

I hope this letter finds you well , it has been so long to hearing from you i have something really exciting news to share with you is i decided to expand my business to another city and i have heard that Mumbai is one of the best city to expand your business , As you may know i have clothing business so it will be beneficial for me to come there and check the location as well as rent for the places everything is important and that is the reason i have decided to come to Mumbai city .

I am very exciting to see you and city because i have heard so many things about your city as you are familiar with the city so i really want to explore the places which is good to see and food , i also heard that this city has so much to see but i am not familiar with that , so i am requesting you to join me if you have time.

I am coming there on this Thursday , I am letting you know in advance so that you have time to settle everything in job and join me for my visiting

I am looking forward to see you soon .

Yours lovingly

HP

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.5

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You explained the purpose of your trip (business expansion), asked for recommendations regarding sightseeing and food, and extended a clear invitation to your friend. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, maintaining a friendly and informal register throughout. The ideas are relevant and clearly presented, ensuring the reader understands your intentions. To improve, you could provide slightly more specific details about the nature of your clothing business or the specific types of sightseeing you enjoy to further develop your ideas and make the letter more engaging.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by a lack of appropriate punctuation and cohesive devices. For instance, the first paragraph is essentially one long run-on sentence, which makes it difficult to follow. Using more varied linking words such as 'consequently,' 'furthermore,' or 'in addition' would help improve the logical progression of your ideas. While the overall structure is clear, the mechanical nature of the transitions and the frequent use of comma splices prevent the response from reaching a higher band score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to communicate your message effectively. You use words like 'expand,' 'beneficial,' and 'familiar' correctly. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'it has been so long to hearing from you' (should be 'to hear') and 'I am very exciting' (should be 'excited'). Additionally, some phrasing is repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'city' and 'business.' To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and ensure that your word forms (adjectives vs. verbs) are used accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

Your writing shows a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow. You struggle with sentence boundaries, often using commas where periods or semicolons are required, leading to run-on sentences. There are also errors in verb tense and form, such as 'I decided to expand' (should be 'I have decided') and 'looking forward to see' (should be 'looking forward to seeing'). While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of these errors in basic grammar and punctuation limits your score in this criterion.

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