Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You are planning a business trip to another city. You will have some free time to do some sightseeing while you are there.
 

Write a letter to a friend who lives in the city you will visit. In your letter:
• explain the purpose of the trip.
• ask about things to do and see in the city.
• invite your friend to do something with you during your visit.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 5.0)

hy ahmed

how are u? hooe so u are fine by grace if alalh almighty. i am writing you to express my feelings that i am so much happy and excited as i ma travelling to u means vomig to ur cityy fot my vacations ..

we will plan our trip accordingly to ur leaves from your job..

i want to explore muree in Pakistan as it is a beautiful valley. we will emjoy chair lift also and will eat delicious food in the valley.

we will see nature's relfection in that beautiful place.we will do alot of shopping and will definitely buy the famous dry fruits there.

i ask you to get leaves from your job and take out some time for the beautifaul journey and adventure. we will hair a jeep for our road trips and will also move towards nathia gali. it will be a beautiful adventure

looking forward for your response.

have a good day ahead....

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You make a relevant attempt to explain the trip and suggest activities, mentioning sightseeing in Murree, the chair lift, local food, shopping, and a jeep trip towards Nathia Gali. However, the letter only partly fulfils the task: it describes a holiday rather than clearly explaining the purpose of the business trip, and it does not ask Ahmed what he recommends seeing or doing. The invitation is present in “get leaves from your job,” but it is not expressed clearly as a specific plan to do something together. These omissions leave the purpose and requests underdeveloped. State that you are visiting for a work meeting, ask for your friend’s recommendations, and invite him to join you for one named activity.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The ideas are generally related and follow a basic sequence: you introduce the visit, describe possible activities, and close by asking your friend to join you. This gives the reader a simple overall structure. However, the message is presented as one continuous block, and the progression between the business visit, sightseeing plans, and invitation is not always clear. Linking phrases such as “During my free time” or “Would you like to join me?” would make the relationships between ideas easier to follow. The opening and closing are recognisable, but clearer paragraphing and more purposeful transitions would improve the organisation.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a basic range of relevant vocabulary, including “beautiful valley,” “chair lift,” “delicious food,” “shopping,” and “road trips,” so the reader can identify the activities you have in mind. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several spelling or word-choice errors make parts of the letter difficult to understand, such as “hooe,” “vomig,” “emjoy,” and “hair a jeep.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “nature’s relfection” and “take out some time for the beautiful journey.” Choose accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully. More precise language for the work purpose and the invitation would also help you communicate the task more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a few connected and complex sentences, for example, “I want to explore Murree in Pakistan as it is a beautiful valley,” and “we will hire a jeep for our road trips and will also move towards Nathia Gali.” Most of the message relies on simple future statements, however, and errors occur frequently. Examples include “I am travelling to u means coming to ur city” and “we will plan our trip accordingly to ur leaves,” where sentence construction and grammatical relationships are unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly at the start of sentences and in the closing. Practise forming clear sentences with accurate verb patterns, articles, and punctuation, then proofread each sentence.

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