Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

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IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people believe that children who commit crimes should be punished. Others argue that their parents should be punished. The question of who is responsible can be difficult.

Discuss both views and provide your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is believed by many that children should be punished for commiting crimes. Critics argue that their parents should be punished. It is often challenging to question the responsible in this matter. This essay will discuss both these views before presenting m own opinion.

On the one hand, it is important to teach children lesson for illicit activties from their young age. Shaping children personality and telling them about good and bad things is the responsibility of their parents and teachers. For instance, children thefting materials or money from the household or from other people's belongings should be punished immediately. As a result, they will learn that this activity has negative consequences. Eventually, they will restrict themselves in involving such situations.

On the other hand, those who argue that the guardians of these children should be pushined instead of them is because children learn from their parent's actions. When children see the parents involving in illegal activities they also start to follow their footsteps. This is evident in unemployed people who gets involved in drug trafficking and others. Therefore, their children observe their actions and follow them.

However I remain convinced that children do get influenced by their company but they are also capable of making independent choices according to their knowledge. Punishing parents entirely for a child's action is not a positive thing because then children won't learn from their mistakes.

In conclusion, although children should be held responsible for their own actions, it is also true that they learn from their elders. Nevertheless, people should make children and elders accountable for their actions instead of punishing parents for children.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and give a clear position: children should be accountable, while parents should not be punished entirely for their children’s actions. The discussion of children’s responsibility is supported by the example of theft and the idea that consequences can teach them. You also explain how children may imitate parents involved in illegal activity. However, the second view is less fully developed: the example of unemployed people and drug trafficking is broad and does not explain when, or why, punishing parents would be justified. Your opinion could also be made more precise by distinguishing parental influence from parental responsibility. Develop that distinction and support it with a specific example to make the response more complete and convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for each view, your own position, and a conclusion. Signposting such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” makes the progression easy to follow. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some of the flexibility associated with stronger cohesion. At times, however, links between ideas are mechanical or the reference is unclear. For example, “This is evident in unemployed people” does not clearly connect the parents’ behaviour to the claim about children, and “Therefore” repeats the preceding point rather than advancing it. Use more precise references and explain the relationship between examples and claims instead of relying mainly on formulaic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “illicit activities,” “illegal activities,” “consequences,” and “accountable,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “follow their footsteps,” though the natural collocation is “follow in their footsteps.” Overall, the range is limited and several word-choice, word-form, and spelling errors reduce precision: “commiting,” “activties,” “thefting,” and “pushined” are noticeable, while “question the responsible” is not an appropriate expression. Some phrases, such as “involving in such situations,” are also unnatural. Build a more accurate set of collocations for crime, responsibility, and parental influence, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “children who commit crimes” and a contrast introduced by “although.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors occur across the response. For example, “teach children lesson” needs an article and plural form, “Shaping children personality” needs a possessive determiner, and “those who argue … should be punished … is because” has faulty sentence structure and agreement. In “unemployed people who gets involved,” the verb does not agree with the plural subject. These errors do not generally prevent communication, but they limit control. Practise accurate noun phrases, subject–verb agreement, and sentence construction, then proofread each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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