Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing to inform you about the parking lot available at the back of my apartment. I cannot find an empty space to park my car at the parking space most of the time.

To start with, My neigbhours get home from work before me several times, which they all park their cars at the parking lot. For this reason, I cannot find an empty space to park my car when I get home from work several times.

This is a serious issue for me because I do not feel secured whenever I pack my car at another space aside from the parking space at the back of my building. It will really affect me if my car got damaged or stolen when parked in another space.

I suggest you tell other tenants to start parking at the back of their apartments or you employ a security to look after our cars in the compound, so that we can all be assured of the safety of our properties.

I look forward to hearing from you by next week to discuss the issue and suggest other possible solutions.

Yours faithfully,

Oluwaseun Bello.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points clearly: you explain that neighbours occupy the spaces before you return, describe your concern about leaving your car elsewhere, and propose tenant guidance or security. Your purpose and request remain clear throughout, and the possible risk of damage or theft gives a relevant reason for your concern. The proposed solutions are useful, although the first—asking tenants to park “at the back of their apartments”—does not clearly explain how this would create more available spaces. To strengthen the response further, specify a practical measure such as assigning spaces, setting parking rules, or marking visitor bays, and explain briefly how it would help. The letter is appropriately directed to the landlord and maintains a suitable formal tone.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall progression: it introduces the parking problem, explains its cause, describes its effect on you, and ends with proposed solutions and a request for a response. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and phrases such as “For this reason” and “I suggest” help connect the ideas. However, some linking is mechanical or repetitive: the point that you cannot find a space is stated in both the opening and the next paragraph, and “several times” is repeated. The relationship between the two suggested solutions could also be made clearer. More concise referencing and a smoother transition from the problem to the request would make the cohesion more flexible and natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the situation and your concern, including “empty space,” “damaged or stolen,” and “possible solutions.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which limits precision. “Pack my car” is not the intended expression; use “park my car.” “Secured” is also unnatural for describing how you feel, where “safe” or “secure” would fit better. The phrase “at another space aside from the parking space” is cumbersome, and “employ a security” is not idiomatic. There is also a spelling error in “neigbhours.” Aim for more natural collocations and vary repeated terms such as “space” and “park.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple sentences and longer structures, including a relative clause in “neighbours get home from work before me” and a conditional idea about what might happen to your car. The message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors persist. In “which they all park their cars,” the clause needs a suitable connector, such as “and they park” or “so they park.” The sentence “It will really affect me if my car got damaged or stolen” mixes verb forms; “It would really affect me if my car were damaged or stolen” is more consistent. Capitalisation after “To start with,” and punctuation around the long sentence also need attention. More accurate control of these structures would improve clarity.

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