Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Dear sir

I am writing this letter in your good health. In this letter I talk about I live in small apartment building with a parking lot in back. I am come home from work I have no parking my car. I am go a night work shift an then come back at morning time 7'0 clock. When I come at home I am park my car far from home and more rick at parking. I know all facility in building but parking space are shots. Please sir i request you that problem solve such as need one more parking in building like under ground parking.

Hoping for a favorable response from you.

your faithfully

UPPAL

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover all parts of the prompt, including describing the parking situation, explaining why it bothers the writer, and suggesting a solution such as building underground parking. However, the development of ideas is severely limited and repetitive. More importantly, the response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement, containing only 116 words instead of the required 150 words. This under-length impacts the overall fulfillment of the task, as the points are presented in a very brief, underdeveloped manner without sufficient expansion. Consequently, the score is penalized for length and limited elaboration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing and has a very disjointed structure. Sentences are isolated and lack cohesive links, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. For instance, the transition from describing the work shift ('I am go a night work shift') to the parking problem is abrupt. The letter does use a standard sign-off, but referencing within the text is unclear, particularly with pronouns and conjunctions. Overall organisation is minimal, aligning with a band 5 performance where logical progression is lacking.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, such as 'small apartment building', 'parking lot', and 'home'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'I am come home', 'more rick at parking' instead of 'more risk', and 'parking space are shots' instead of 'short'. The student attempts some basic vocabulary related to housing and work, but the range is limited and frequently inaccurate, impeding comprehension at times. This corresponds to a band 4.5 level of lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text is dominated by frequent basic errors, including incorrect verb tenses and auxiliary verbs, such as 'I am writing this letter in your good health', 'I talk about I live', and 'I am come home'. Sentence structures are overwhelmingly simple and faulty when attempted, such as 'I am go a night work shift an then come back at morning time 7'0 clock.' Punctuation is also poorly handled. Because errors occur in almost every sentence and frequently impede smooth reading, the grammar fits the band 4 descriptors.

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