Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Barron's Writing · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You live in a small apartment building with a parking lot in back, and you often cannot find an empty parking space when you get home from work.

Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter
• describe the situation.
• explain why it bothers you.
• suggest something the landlord could do to solve the problem.

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ____

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir / Madam

Hope this found you in good .I am writing this to disscus the parking problem i face everyday when I came home from work .

I have a 12 hours shit of work at office and when I came home my energy is almost drained, and then I have to look for the parking in the apartment parking lot which is very frustrating and cause fighting between the residents and this happens because of inefficient parking lots .

I here by suggest you to allow one fixed car and bike parking to every resident, and for the visitor we can make another parking in the front also we need more parking space for our residents. If someone park their car in someone else parking lot they should be fined and must pay the penalty which will help us to make sure that all residents follow this rule of fixed parking.

Hope my suggestion will help in solving parking problem .

Looking forward to your prompt response

yours's sincerely

Rabia tahir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three points: you describe difficulty finding a space after work, explain that it is frustrating when you are tired and can lead to conflict, and propose assigned spaces, visitor parking, and penalties for misuse. The purpose of writing to the landlord is clear. Some ideas, however, are less fully explained than others. For example, you mention that the parking lot is inefficient but do not describe how often spaces are unavailable or whether residents currently share unmarked spaces. Your suggestions would be more persuasive if you clarified how spaces could be allocated and whether creating front parking is practical. A more explicit request for the landlord to take a particular next step would also strengthen the letter.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a generally sensible order: it introduces the problem, explains its effect, offers solutions, and closes with a request for a response. This makes the overall message easy to follow. However, most of the content is placed in two long paragraphs, and several ideas are joined together in lengthy sentences, particularly the explanation of your workday and the proposed parking rules. This makes the progression less clear at points. Use separate paragraphs for the situation, its impact, and your suggestions, and divide the longer sentences into shorter units. Linking phrases such as “As a result” or “To address this” could make the relationships between ideas clearer without relying on repeated “and”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “parking lot,” “residents,” “visitor,” “fined,” and “penalty,” so the reader can understand the main concern and proposed rules. There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “Looking forward to your prompt response.” However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “disscus,” “shit” for “shift,” and “fixed car and bike parking,” which is not a natural way to describe allocated spaces. Phrases such as “parking problem” and “parking space” are also repeated. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common collocations, such as “designated parking space” and “parking allocation.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, especially in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries. For example, “when I came home” should be “when I come home” for a recurring situation, while “this happens because of inefficient parking lots” needs a clearer grammatical connection to the preceding sentence. In “which is very frustrating and cause fighting,” the verb should agree with the subject (“causes”), and “look for the parking” would normally take an article or different construction. The opening and closing also need more accurate punctuation and capitalization. Practise editing each sentence for tense consistency and subject–verb agreement.

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